Good story so far, and that line i believe is from Stand By Me about Ray Brower.

awsome story! I loved it!

way good ! keep it up ok plz!

not bad. not bad.

"This was so shocking it almost knocked me out of my Keds."

"The train had knocked Ray Brower out of his Keds like it had knocked the life out of him."

Stand By Me.

Do I get those ten points?

It is a very interesting story and you should keep it up!

UPDATE ASAP thax. I LUV IT!

:P )

ok im confused. is she the murderer or is it her brother or father?

I liked the story :) Continue as long as you can.

i like it. a lot. don't have many suggestions tho. update soon!

Awesome, this was really great. I am so glad you finally updated. I can't wait to read more of the great ideas you have! Thanks for the great chapter!

Always,

-Ember

I love this story, I rarely get hooked on any story here anymore but I love yours. I don't think its too much like a soap opera & I love the direction things are heading in. This last chapter was my favourite so far! Great work, thanks so much for sharing.

Wow, these last two chapters were amazing.

You are a very good writer!

Please continue, I love Marylin & I'm not ready for her story to end!

Nice story. No, its not to much like a soap opra. its very well thought out.

Update fast!

-Kitten.

*Is waiting very impatientally (sp?) for the nxt chapter to be put up* Please update soon! *breaks down and cries*

hey good story up-date