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PLEASE update

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Totally. There was definately some sugar intake on both their parts, but after that grunging, I can see why. I love how you cut it off. Its sexy, but mysterious enough that the reader can fill in the blanks with their own mind.

Can't wait to read more! Love you tons! I promise to work on my stories, too

-Moe

update

I love the depth about both the girls' characters. Shizuru's observant- Yukina's got that thing with birdies. Totally cool.

I'd give you a 3.14/10, but I dont think you'd appreciate that low score just because pi is my favorite number. I give it an 8.