Like I said before this is a really wonderful fic in which you've shown Zelos as the complex character with real, strong feelings and emotions which he is if you look deeply enough under the flippant, flirty surface.

A wonderful snap-shot of Zelos at that point in the game, a fantastic fic with some lovely language and ideas in it that shows his relationship with Sheena and the others beautifully :)

That was very wely written! good thoughts and shapign, it's very nice.

You've written the more serious, sensative side of Zelos really well here :) It's great to see that. The observations about Sheena's softer side that he makes are nice too. Once again a great piece of writing :)

This is a really nice bit of writing :) Both of them seem very in character, it's clear that Genis feels the need to protect Presea, do his best for her, in the game. Equally Presea seems like the sort of person who would keep her troubles to herself rather than talk to others about them. Seems like you've captured how Genis would feel about that very well. Wonderful stuff :)

This is lovely, Ilvinaeda... I think you've pegged Sheena's voice dead-on, especially towards the end of the poem. Favorite moment would have to be how she pecks him on the cheek, he smiles slyly, and that's *enough*. The peace of the moment, the recognization of an affection that is probably even more difficult due to the clash of personalities...

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Sweet and light, but ultimately *honest*... very Sheena, as much as she is razored cards and fierce independence as well.

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Regards,

~Sabriel.

That was very sweet. I don't know if he would be able to actually say it to her, mostly because of how shy and flustered he gets, though I think it is an accurate portrayal of his feelings. _ Nice job!

It's all good, you did well in writing this.

Good! Very Good! This one was very well done! everything was very well written into one nice piece.

I know this isn't character-specific, and I wasn't reading it with any character in mind.. though it came across as somewhat Raine-like. Not entirely in her character, perhaps, but that's what it seemed.

Your poems are amazing. I don't think you need me to tell you that. :)

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Good! Very Good! you go in-depth to the feelings adn such with all good descriptions, very well done.

Good! Very well written! it's fantastic!

A very powerful and touching piece of writing. Wonderful stuff :)

Once again you seem to have gotten into the character's thoughts well. You've nicely captured the conflicting emotions Sheena would be going through. I think, deep down inside she knows that there's more to Zelos than the flirting, flippant attitude. To admit that, and to admit that she likes that side of him, would be difficult for her I think. To admit that she, an independent, strong, Mizuho ninja would want a meaningful relationship including love with someone like him may be difficult for her as well perhaps, as it seems she likes giving the impression she's capable of doing things by herself and of being independent. You've kinda conveyed that well I think.

There is more to Zelos than the pervert personality, it's a shame when people don't see it. Perhaps it's because a lot of background for the deeper side of him's only really found in places like his Flanoir scene. I think Sheena would perhaps pick up on the fact that he's a more complicated character than he first appears to be, but again perhaps it'd be difficult for her to admit that.

Anyways, I shall stop rambling now :) Very nice fic/poem :)

Absolutely wonderful :) I think you've really nicely conveyed not only the deep affection Lloyd feels for Colette but also some of the way he feels about what's been happening and is happening around him as well. Seemed very, well, Lloyd, if that makes sense? :) Lovely stuff _