Nice. If Joren hadn't been dead and hadn't been so obnoxious, this would have been quite probable. Poor Kel. And... dare I say it? Poor Joren.

The last paragraph almost made me cry...

Hey...I loved your story. I thought it was so well written, I could sense the mood you portrayed and for a short story thats pretty awesome!

This was extremely sad, and I don't normally read sad things, but this is amazing. I loved it.

Great story - interesting and well written.

The ending was beautifully done (but maybe it would be good to have a sequel? Even though I think that they die...)Sad but sweet.

That was good...I guess, and though I'm pretty sure they died, it would be nice to know... :)

Sad. Very beautifully written. Great work, nicely done.

Keep Writing,

xxTunstall Chickxx

hiya

first to say i think that the plot is good and the story well written

the only critique "" i have is that you should make this a long series- storie thing

any good job!

This was an interesting idea. I like the fact that you made Joren into a good guy. I don't think most people would have. I really enjoyed reading it.

Aw...Sweet. I've never been much of a Joren/Kel fan but it was cute. More of a Merric/Kel, Dom/Kel, Neal/Kel. You know...Normal pairings. Still cute...!

did they die?

Sad.. very, very well written...I loved it. Your style is really smooth and you didn't over dramatize it at all. Your ending was beautiful. No sudden escape possibility or hope of rescue. Simple and realistic. Wonderful work.

Very compelling. It's nice to see a different side of this relationship. As much as I think they died, I want to believe they lived. Oh, well.

Whoa,that was thrown right at me. I love Kel/Joren fics. This one was one of the best one's I've read. I t's very believable. My friends think I'm crazy to even consider Jorenkel as friends much less something "other" than friends. But what can I say I'm weird! Thanks for the great story,Rowana S. BYE!

Shessy-chan

Yeah,Amazing I can just picture them dancing right know!Yet Boohoo, so sad I can see them dying also i can here the arrows flying, Really I can!You did an amazing job

I stopped reading Tamora Pierce after Trickster's Choice. But I saw this on someones favorite list, and it told me to click on it. Really depressing, but I liked it anyway. It was good.