Oh, You mean you are also a Raphael fan. Love the story. It was so poetic. Sorry if you take it the wrong way. Hope you enjoyed typing it cause I enjoyed reading it.

It's nice to know that Raph really loves his brothers and I'm sure the all know it. I hope someday he'll actually them though.

Ah, now Raph's turn, although I think I'm doing this from the top down, so - this review is definitely out of order! LOL

Best line that says so much is - "I want to tell them so badly just how much they mean to me!"

Yes, that's Raph, but it all gets muddled up with his temper and gungho attitude.

Poor guy.

Great stuff here! More plot bunnies hopp'n around, too.

Be blessed.

Okay, the weirdest thing happened to me with this poem...whenever the computer pulled up this page, it would only let me read half of it, and I couldn't review! Stupid technology.

Anyway - loved this. It just goes to show all of us how diverse poetry can be. The short sentences worked to your advantage with this...it fit the message, fit Raphael, and was nicely worded. Kudos to you on another one!

GO CUBS! (sorry, I love my baseball!)

~SASSY

Oh, this is so good. Your poetry skills are wonderful, so doubt them not. This is one of the best portrayals of Raphael's personality that I have ever seen. I look forward to more poetry from you, so keep up the good work.

Beautiful! And so completely Raphael!

There are so many hidden layers on that guy.. I wouldn't even know where to begin. But you did - and you did it well.

Nice work, Chibi!

wow, that's deep. you've really captured the way raph feels about himself. he's still trying to find who he is. nice job. i hope to see one on don and mikey soon!

MoNiCa

Wowee, that's deep and intriging. Awesome job, Chibi!

LN

I got shivers on that last line. That was beautiful.

Raph's still trying to find himself and you captured that wonderfully!

Cheers,

~pacphys~

Less of a poem, more like a prose.

Prose being that it is a very short story, Looks like a poem, but doesn't have all the rhythm that most poems are defined by.

Does that mean I hate it..?

NOPE

I like the premise of this whole poem/prose. It is probably what Raph will say if he ever had the guts to truly speak his mind. Should I expect a Don and Mike one soon, like I think you would do?

We'll see. Surprise me...