| Reviews for Soushouyruu |
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   GaaHinaLover chapter 1 . 7/4/2012 awwwwww! so KAWAII! |
| Oyako-sama chapter 1 . 8/23/2010 Woooooo! Neji/Tenten rules! |
| StarHMH chapter 1 . 6/18/2010 You should seriously quit putting so many author notes in your story, it's really annoying. Grtz |
| fLaMing pAssi0n chapter 1 . 6/23/2009 Just a little tip: author's notes go at the end and beginning of the story, and you can fit a short, no more than a sentence one, in for clarification. I understand you're trying to make it funny, but it really bothers readers who want to get into the story. I not really a fan of romanji either. |
| tori chapter 1 . 12/4/2008 aw! that was so cute. awesome story! tori |
| Jia Min chapter 1 . 10/1/2008 it's ok |
| Mystic Twirl chapter 1 . 7/6/2008 so so funny i could not stop laughing |
| too-much-romance chapter 1 . 11/24/2007 If this is your first, then it's amazingly cute! And some points in there ARE funny. 8D But the way you make Neji just admit jealousy...eh, not really working for it. You should probably just say concerned, like: I am not jealous. I am not jealous. I'm...concerned for my teammate. If she gets married, then that'll mean I can't- we can't train as long as before. And then he'll nod to himself triumphantly. (Or just me, because I have a thing for nodding like Sasuke and Neji. *sweatdrop*) It's a good thing what you did there with the Author's Note. That was humor. A guy marrying a weapons specialist…how interesting. A guy not a ninja marrying a weapons specialist…How stupid. That right there was amusing. “Ladies first.” “Sadly, there is none in our presence.” That was pure genius. TENSAI! Tenten is making fun of Neji's feminine hair (and the way he puts his hand on his hips like girls do. I EVEN DO THAT!) while Neji is making fun of HER tomboyish nature, and saying it in a very smart, obnoxious, Neji-ish way. EXCELLENT! This is great for your first! SPREAD THE NEJITEN LOVE! YEAH! WOOT! WHEN IN DOUBT, PINKY OUT, AND NEJITEN WILL GUIDE YOUR HEART! |
| HJWG chapter 1 . 5/30/2007 Some constructive criticism: the author note's have to go. |
| sora girlfriend chapter 1 . 10/10/2006 yeah |
| issoooo0oooosickofbullshit1234 chapter 1 . 8/19/2006 awkoibito that's an adoriblle name |
| Elephantie chapter 1 . 6/30/2006 lol! so many author's note's...actually some strange way i find them funnier...i was laughing at what you said rather than the story, strange isn't it...lol :) |
| ally ally oxenfree chapter 1 . 6/7/2006 Aw, cute! |
| Yadda Blah chapter 1 . 3/2/2006 OMFG! They squealed? Truley sadist, third def. Meep! |
| TheEndlessSnow chapter 1 . 1/18/2006 i just love lee and Gai but the story was sweet i loved it |
