So, on the one hand, I think reviewers are correct when they call your main character over-powered. Alex really does go into Gary Stu power fantasy territory as this story develops. But also, that's okay. Fan-fiction should be fun, and it's fun to write your own self-insert being a badass in an anime world. So if you are having fun, keep it up! Honestly, for a SI story, your writing is really good. You've added really interesting new ideas, you are great with description and details, and you've got a good sense of humor. And you've managed to give some attention to all the Lodoss main/side characters, which is great. I think you could have a go at being a professional writer. My main advice, if you start writing original fiction, is to take your main characters down a notch. Let them be flawed in ways that actually have consequences, let them genuinely be in the wrong, or get humiliated. Let them need help from other characters, because there are things that they can't do. It makes them more complex and relatable, and honestly, reading about a god-level protagonist who's never (or rarely) wrong can get tiresome. I don't know if that advice is welcome or not, but that's what I suggest if you try to go pro. But that doesn't really apply to this story. This story is meant for fun, so have fun, and let Alex be as badass as you want him to be. I'm not trying to bash your writing here. I honestly think you're a good writer. Good luck in the future.

dam fine story. please update we are still waiting. Thank you for writing this.

Please update this story! It's at the climax already! I want to see the end!

I hate you now hurry up and finish this damn epic shit

Oh hey, this is updated! Yay!

Wow... just wow, you handles that so well, as you know my own Lodoss story ;)... as yours was the one I was hoping to, not rival per se... but stand alongside with pride I guess. you were my inspiration and I thank you for it :).

Now as to this chapter, you could imagine Manaweaver grinding his teeth over the treatment of Deedlit... yea not smart to piss off him eh? Still I do hope you are planning more books of Murphy, I would love to see them, and more Alex & Deedlit :). Hope everything goes well for the next chapter and see you soon with my next update of Chronicles of the Draconic Knight.

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Great story don't give up now show us an epic ending.

Pretty Damn good man, I don't see such long fics here anymore.

Looks like ffnet destroyed the formatting on whatever you're using to differentiate goblin speech in chapter 4-5 or so.

Wow, haven't checked on this fic for years, only to find its been updated in the last five months! Awesome.

Somehow I'd failed to favorite this the first time around. Fixed that now, let me tell you.

Nice chapter and great one with he soldiers misunderstanding setting up as a fallen king.

Nice chapter ,seems Deed and Alex romance was bashed with the new info.

Nice chapter.

Seems interesting.

Holy fucking shit. Did this actually get updated?