a little better than art house dude who almost brought Shakespeare in their story

Omg this was great, I thought was funny and had a good amount of sexiness, keep it up.

Wow. Haha this was really interesting and good. :D And you didn't proofread it at all? Wowza that's amazing!

AWWW! So cute 3

Oh, this is good!

Cute!

:)

Despite your extensive list of put-downs at the beginning, I read your story anyway :). I see no point in your complaints - you did a wonderful job with Roy and Riza's characters, and the pace of the story was simply spot on. Keep up the great work!

Ahahaha I love the internal thoughts! Makes me rofl so hard.

Gya, fianlly, a kiss between the two couple.

Great writing. Enjoyed it all the way.

Ah, that was awesome! Exactly what I was looking for! Flawlessly developed, wonderfully in-character (it's disastrous when they're not) and perfect grammar! A definite addition to my favorites.

One of the two most in-character Royai fanfictions I have read, bravo. Now Im off to read your other one, I can hardly wait :D

I love how you write Roy's inner voice. That was really enjoyable and fun! Well-done fluff like this isn't easy to find. Thanks for sharing. :)

:)

Aww. Very sweet, wonderful. Very fluffy...but you managed to make me not roll my eyes but actually smile.

Very nice story. They're all in-character, well-developed plot, and the ending dialogue was a nice touch. Sorry. Am useless for criticism, because am head-over-heels in love with this story. *Holds up hands in defeat*

Loved it!