Wonderful job! I love how you managed to portray the whole anime series in another POV!

I know it's almost five years since you added the last chapter, but if you're still interested and motivated please try to finish the story. Maybe you could add in Mizuho Fujisawa to get some fresh ideas.

Thank you.

that was relly sad the way i took it at the end PM me if im wrong but did you just kill off mitsumi

A wonderfully written story, Mtgradwell-san! 1st person POV suits this story just perfectly, and your characterization is simply wonderful as well! Keep up your wonderful writing, Mtgradwell-san, I am really looking forward to the next chapter of this wonderful story of yours!

Soldier, this story isn't over yet, is it? Please, tell me it isn't! It's beautiful! I'm a grean Mutsumi fan. I love her! And believe, if you didn't put her and Keitaro together, I'd have come after your raggety ass right away! Hoo-rrah! (Cough) Well, that's all. Excelent story. Good job, soldier.

Semper-Fi! Carry on!

more...more...more!

Very amusing, very cute, and very fluffy story! It fits Mutsumi perfectly in that regard. Some darker things are hinted at but you never break the fluff; for this story that works wonderfully! You did a good job of making us see through Mutsumi's eyes to a much more innocent world. Even the romance in the end, because it was so fast, feels like out of something from a fairy tale. I am not sure that is what you were going for but ultimately thats how it came out!

Glad I read this, got me to smile. Keep up the good work and I hope you keep writing!

I really liked this. It's long enough to be a good read, yet short enough to satisfy my desire for WAFF and Keitaro and Mutsumi pairings. I also think that the Mutsumi POV works well for this, though I don't write that way in my own work. There don't seem to be many Keitaro and Mutsumi works, just yours and mine that I know of.

It's a very good chapter. The explanation for the "Toudai" promisses plus the disappearing of Naru's father was quite good - and the marriage Mutsumi X Keitaro is very desired for lots of fans! And you put some tenderness when Mutsumi stated that "the Hinata tenants are part of my family". I can reassure my congratulations for a good job!

Ah, the bible phrase used in this chapter (Love is kind...) is very important to me, because a Brazilian group called "Legião Urbana" made a song based on that phrase (and some others, from several religions, about Love) named "Monte Castelo".

Another great chapter, but we will see a wedding night scene? LOL

Mutsumi is a VERY difficult character to write, mainly because you don't know what goes on in her head most of the time.

On that note, I congratulate you presenting a very nice and accurate Mutsumi POV something that I don't recall reading in a fanfic. The way it followed and then deviated from the Love Hina cannon was also nice.

The twist at the end was also well done and I am looking forward to reading more.

No for a few facts that you might not know about Mutsumi. The reason you don't is that they are chronicled in the Love Hina Dreamcast games (which actually tie up really well with the Manga and anime)

Here goes:

-Mutsumi has the ability to wander briefly outside her body for a small amount of time.

-Mutsumi is the only person that actually gets to kill Keitaro in the game (kill as in him dead). The scene involves a watermelon, Mutsumi in her spirit form, outside her body, and a terrific performance by Mutsumi's seiyuu (you just have to listen to it to believe it). It's actually quite funny, but I find it ironic that Mutsumi, of all people, is the only one that has the ability to kill Keitaro.

Anyway, perphaps you can find a good use for those two little bits of newfound knowledge. I trust you will use them well...

wow what a amazing story and with a couple I never really considered much thank you for your wondeful story

Wow, it sure took you a while. But it was well worth the wait. Good chapter and I think you did well with the wedding. I hope to see a sooner update next time.

Definetly after this chapter this Keit/Muts story goes to my FavouritesStories list.

KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK.

Well, I've read up until chapter 14 and I really like the story, expecially since its from Mutsumi-chan's point of view. As foar as the Love Hina characters go, Mutsumi, Shinobu, and Motoko, are my favorite characters, and its nice to see a story that focuses soley on Mutsumi, instead of Naru-baka. And this story is also On my favorites list so I will definetly be looking for an update. Ja ne