| Reviews for Death's Last day |
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   Remotecat25 chapter 1 . 1/5/2014 The story was funny...but it didn't follow the writing the previous author had done in "On a Pale Horse." |
| Crystal M. Key chapter 1 . 12/10/2012 That was interesting, a good explanation for the changeover. I'm assuming Fate knew it would be this Death's last client, so she gave him a good time before he went? Thanks for the amusement. |
| bbybyrd chapter 1 . 9/19/2012 awesome prequel! |
| Sheldorfan chapter 1 . 10/10/2011 I liked this. I also like your pen name. |
| AlucardJr chapter 1 . 5/20/2011 I give you my compliment. that was actually well written and quite fun to read. I think the only thing that tugged at me a bit was the no-need-for visit to Fate... but that's just a nit i had to pick |
| Guest chapter 1 . 3/28/2011 Neither good nor bad somewhere in the middle. |
| Kasent and Medeth chapter 1 . 2/6/2011 Not bad persay, I like the genreal idea,and the way it is writtin makes it seems like it works with the book but you didnt go into enouph detail. Did fate know that Death was going to die and wanted to have sex with him before he died, or did she (as I susppect she did) do it beacuse she wanted his hood off so that Zane would kill him and become the new death. Also, after being death for so long, he would know at leats the basics of how fate worked, so he would not be ignorant as to the purpose of the strings. just a fe sugjestions, not a bad start just needs some fine tuning. Oh, and if you get a chanc, review one of my storys back! |
| Haldrian Michael chapter 1 . 2/22/2010 Really good... I thought the reasoning behind his mask being unzipped was good. |
| honeybadger42 chapter 1 . 6/22/2009 Cute story. |
| Tia chapter 1 . 5/27/2009 That... ...Was... ...AWESOME! Haha, how did you even THINK of this? Strings! |
| lokun489 chapter 1 . 5/4/2009 nice shows how fate intervined to get the old out for zane |
| HideousKitten chapter 1 . 1/25/2009 hahahaha, I found that highly amusing. Fate's a bitch, but by the way you portrayed this Death, it's understandable. A very enjoyabe read. |
| Angelheart17 chapter 1 . 9/4/2008 That was good! I love this series! This is a good oneshot! |
| Genevieve chapter 1 . 8/22/2008 LOVED IT. |
| Ananda chapter 1 . 7/12/2008 I realize that i'm posting a bit out of date, but i have some stuff to say. If you want to be true to the book, you need to go back and read the rest of the series. Zane has a very small part in Niobe's book, "With a Tangled Skein" and the previous Death is respected and regarded as a good person. Even in Pale Horse, Fate expresses regret that things had to be done the way they were. She even says he did well enough to go to heaven. Also, Clotho at this point is the Oriental girl who was involved with Samurai. She wouldn't have whored herself out to Death. Otherwise, the concept of documenting the previous Death's last day is intriguing. Rewrite with him less of a jerk. |
