aw! please i beg you! update soon!

aww...poor Ichi! _ i really like him too...onto the next chapter!

Darn it...I want to know what happens next. Things are a bit less distracting but your structure is still throwing me off. A drunk Mitsuo equals a funny Mitsuo. Can't wait for the next chapter.

Well I definitely want to read on and see what happens, but for the moment I've got some suggestions for you. Work on your diction. Work on your syntax. Work on your shifts. Your choice of words, as well as your way of stringing them together isn't horrible, but it could definitely use improvement. And don't string all dialogue together in a single paragraph. If someone new is speaking, at least start a new line. And your shifts, at the moment, are non-existant, so I suggest incorporating them and getting rid of those indications of setting change in the parentheses.

I am compelled to continue reading, so your story is pretty alright overall, but some adjustments could most definitely make for a less distracting, more enjoyable read.

that was very funny and the boy were horny i liked it a lot k.

I really loved the story! You captured their personalities perfectly. However, I did mind all the grammer/spelling mistakes. And some of the dialogue was messed up. For example: "I'll always be able to protect you from perverts like you." It was originaly directed at Mitsuo, but then, was directed to Ichi. Little things like that appeared in your story. I believe if you went over grammer check, this story would've been that much easier to read and would be less confusing.

Oh man, so cute!

i really loved your story! it was so good! you must right more! and yes i love your work your an awsome wrighter. i'll check out your fruits basket story and yuki are justplain sexy! all eerie queerie man are sexy! sexy,sexy men! getting back to reality now. my father has never really cared for manga but he liked your work that's a miracle! , your an inspiracion! thank you! TATA FOR NOW! -

wa please wright more

Well, Chris is right you should do more. That was awesome. Hasunuma is just jealous of Ichi, which makes this even more excited.

Cute! Very nice. I'm slowly getting use to the idea of Ichi/Mitsuo Oh its just so cute!

WAH!

only thirteen fanfics in this fandom!

I love yours.

but there are no Ichi/Hasunuma anywhere which would be an awesome pairing dont you think?

more pleaase

Omg! So kawaii! _ Please continue it. :3 I cant wait for the next chapter. D Ichi/Mitsuo is so cute, you write so well I envy your talant! _

This was really cool. I love eerie queerie. This was a hot story! Please continue!

that is so awesome! You gotta keep it up! I love E.Q. but haven't gotten around to writing me own story yet. I will, but keep writing!