I liked that a whole bunch, man, really!

It seemed a little bit scrambled up, but it fit the story - the whole wish about staying young forever.

I didn't see any typos.

I thought it fit the young age of the boys.

Great job!

It's really good !

that was good

At one point this felt a little slashy. Not really obvious, but I picked up on it. Am I right? I don't really care for slash, but I still like the story. It is JUST like the book, which could be a good thing or a bad thing. I enjoyed the chapter, however. Your writing is direct without the excess garbage people put in. Good job. I'll be checking back with this one. Toodles!

-Chelz

This is really impressive. Please, please continue. This has the spirit of Stephen King's writing, and you have the boys' personalities so well.