Great story...wish they'd gotten together at the end though. xx :( xx Are you doing a sequel? xx :( xx

i love the story but i hate the ending. i wanted micheal and mia to end up together!

In chapter 34 the song is originally by Queen and it's called Somebody to Love. Anne Hathaway does a cover of it in Ella Enchanted. This story is awesome! Great Job with it.

:( It sounds like the end of the story. There's a sequel, right?

I totally cracked up when Micheal called Mia's bf Nappy.

I'm sorry, but I just can't imagine Mia playing guitar.

i dont no wether you no this or not but sarah jane is a dr who charater lol or is that the point? xoxo hptva gurrl

heyya i'd like to introduce myself i'm lauren and as i like this ff u will proberly b hearing a lot frm me xoxo hptva gurrl

ewyewyewyewy what a creative way to break them up

oh fuck me, its 2:30 AM. lol see you're story is so addicting i had to read it all at once, but i just found it today. Very nice. you know, at first i really didn't like how casually michael and mia dated other people. cause its not really like the characters, but i've got to love it cause its real life. its kinda crazy and stupid but its what we(people) really do. i really like that now. giving the characters some believability.(i know..ha) loves not perfect. but anyway thanks for the awesome story, it really makes me think. therefore it is sucessful. (i cant remember where i read that):) sorry for the crazy rant/review. but do keep in mind its 2:30 am. im a bit loopy:)

Okay, the story line itself isnt awful, its the only reason im still reading this, the sex however, rubbish, not sure why its rated M when it doesnt even describe sex at all, if this is smut or Lemon on whatever u want to call it, it has to have SMUT. Go read fiberkitty or imwiththevampire08 they have some brilliant stuff, then if you want I'll maybe look over what u've written and kinda check for lil imrpovements that could be made, but its a big maybe coz ive got lots going on at the moment anyway since im already typing this is an extract from one of the other lemony stories Ive read:

"“Bella, wait. Are you saying you want to have sex now?”

She nodded and came to sit herself on my lap. “Yes. I know its right. Right now, here with you. I trust you, with all that I have. I want you to take me…all of me.” - Bitter Sweet Symphony. Chapter 33 by imwiththevampire08

Now that was heavy stuff, huh? Try something a lil more like that? BTW, its okay if you didnt really understand it but its basically a fan fic of Twilight.

I hesitated as I looked into her eyes. I didn’t want her to regret this in the morning. I knew I wouldn’t…but losing your virginity is a big deal. It’s something you can never get back.

“I don’t know…”

“If you don’t want to do it here in your room, I can respect that. We can go somewhere else if you’d like.”

“No… no that’s not a problem at all. My room is fine. I’m just worried you might regret this later. I mean, this is something you’ll never get back.”

“I have never been sure of anything before. I want it to be you…right now.”

(If listening to music, start Strawberry Wine by Deana Carter)

Before I could protest any further, her mouth came upon mine and kissed me as if she was a starved girl, begging for food that only I could give her. I responded to her touch immediately, moving my arms around her body, pulling her to me even closer.

I felt her hips rocking into me as she sat in my lap, my dick harden quicker than I would’ve thought possible. Her hands were all over my hair, pulling and tugging, making sure I could feel what she was doing to me.

God help me, I wanted her.

I reached down to the hem of my shirt and pulled it over her head, exposing her naked body to my eyes. She was so beautiful and I quickly put her nipple into my mouth, loving how hard they were already.

She arched her back and lifted her body to me, pulling my head in closer to her, as I played with her other nipple. I heard her moans coming from her mouth and I could smell how turned on she was getting.

I pulled back, not wanting to be left behind in all the action. I got up and took off my clothes as well, and lay back on top of her, both of us naked, admiring one another.

I knew that she would not enjoy it because it was her first time, so I wanted to make her relax and try to enjoy the foreplay.

I started working on her beautiful neck, lightly sucking, and kissing her and made my way down her body, stopping at her tits to get one last suck. I continued south until I got to her pussy, which was already glistening and wet for me.

“Are you ready for me? You are very wet.”

She responded by bending her knees and opening her legs wider, giving me an even better view of her beautiful cunt. I bent my head down and gave her a lick, savoring every flavor that was Bella.

“Ung…don’t stop…please just keep licking…”

“M…Bella, are you begging me?”

“Fuck…I’ll do whatever the hell you want, just please don’t stop.”

I smiled as I dove in, wanting her to feel as much pleasure as I knew I was going to soon. My tongue ran up and down her lips, darting in and out of her hole and stopping to finally suck and bite on her clit. I had her body shaking in no time at all, her body letting out her orgasm.

I didn’t stop. I let her clit rest a bit, knowing it would be sensitive at this point. Instead, I concentrated on running my tongue along her lips. Her hips came up to meet my face in no time, and I knew she was ready for a second round.

I lifted my face up from her pussy and kissed her lower stomach, inserting two of my fingers inside of her, trying to get her used to the intrusion.

Oh, god…she was so tight. Fuck, I’m going to have to concentrate so I don’t cum soon.

“Edward…yes…”

I knew she was close. Her breathing was picking up, so I ducked my head back down and took her clit back into my mouth, allowing her to buck up against me. I felt her wonderful hands grab my hair as she steadied herself for another orgasm.

“Fuck…I’m…cumming.”

I felt her cum all around my fingers and mouth, wanting to taste everything that she was giving to me. She rode out her orgasm on my mouth and I looked up to see her chest heaving. Her nipples were hardened and pointed and I wanted to grab them into my mouth and pull with my teeth. She poked her head up and looked down at me, I made a show at darting my tongue out so she could see me lick her.

She smirked at me as she pulled herself up on her elbows. “Wow…I don’t think I could ever get tired of you doing that.”

“Good, because I’m not planning on stopping anytime soon.”

She smiled brightly at me and I made my way up to her, kissing her fully on the mouth. Her arms wrapped around my neck as she pulled me down to her. I kissed her gently, wanting her to know that I would be careful with her…trying to calm her nerves about what would be happening soon.

She seemed to understand my unspoken words because she responded the same way…gently…softly.

Bella finally pulled back a bit and whispered, “I’m ready.”

I nodded and reached over to my bedside table, pulling a condom out and sitting up quickly to put it on my dick. She watched me, her eyes still burning with lust for me. I hoped she’d still feel okay after the deed was done.

I leaned back over her, positioning myself over her entrance and stared into her eyes. “Ready?”

She nodded, cupped my face in her hands, and lightly kissed my mouth. “I’m ready.”

I motioned for her to wrap her legs around me and I grabbed onto her hips. My eyes never leaving hers, I slowly pushed my way inside. Her fingers played with my hair, letting me know she was okay. I pushed in deeper, and this time, she bit her bottom lip.

“Still okay?”

“Yeah…you’re just bigger than I thought.”

I laughed lightly at her and responded, “Always with the compliments.”

She smiled and I used that momentary distraction to push my way in a bit more. She grunted a bit but said, “Its okay, not too painful, just a bit uncomfortable.”

I nodded and rocked my hips back and forth. She felt so good; it took all my control to not just slam myself into her.

I rocked a bit more, then I felt the resistance inside of her, I knew I was at her barrier. She shifted a bit underneath me and said, “This is it, huh?”

I nodded and asked once more, “Are you sure.”

“Yes.”

With that, I pushed in the last of the way. Her eyes closed for a moment and she held her breath. All movement stopped."

great story!

now for part two :)

40 chapters and they didn't even get together in the end?

Fantastic.

I have to admit, I really really liked your story at first, I liked that you were going to take things slow... but then it just got ridiculous. And no, I'm not even talking about how long the story is, I mean the plot (or lack thereof). You seemed to be creating new twists and turns with absolutely no purpose other than to "shock" people or something. And what was up with all the boyfriends and girlfriends? Haven't you ever heard of someone being single for more than one week? And why, if Mia was so in love with Michael, did she keep saying how "great" her new boyfriends were? One minute she wants Michael and only him, the next she decides she really really likes someone else.

And yes, I'm aware you can like more than one person at a time, but after a while it got a bit old, especially since all of Mia's relationships were the same. One minute she was all "I had to pretend I liked him.. sigh" then she was all "God I love him, but I don't deserve him. I think I'll have sex with Michael tonight after I fool around." It was the exact same with Michael too. I just don't understand your logic. It was all so unrealistic, because people just can't switch their emotions on and off like that. Human minds just don't work like that.

So yeah, this is my review. You'll probably reply asking why I even finished it. To be honest I was just praying, for my own sanity, that you'd finally make them BOTH dump their respective boyrfriends and girlfriends, and make them come to their senses.

I like when relationships start slow, even build over a few years, but that's just it, it has to GROW. With this story it was like one step forward, two steps back.

it was really good but the ending wasnt that good. plz add a sequel or more chapters

cool! it was very interesting. did m & m ever end up ?

hey, great story, I am really enjoying it. it is helping me procrastinate doingmy English essay, thanks. I just wanted to point out that the song "find me somebody to love" is actually a Queen song. i am a major Queen fan and i would hate for Anne Hathaway to get credit for their song. hehe. thanks again, and happy writing.