When the next part?

wow! i love this story! haha. it's adorable. i enjoy the writing style also. simple, yet, enticing.

hope you get bac ksoon

I love this fic, it's really sweet at first, and then comes the dirtiness, I like the dirtiness xD Hurry with the next chapter!:D

Whoops, my bad. At first glance it looked like you had 168 reviews, but it's not... my only excuse is I'm not wearing my glasses. They're very annoying... my bad. LOL. Hope I didn't get anything else wrong! Sorry. (That's a fun game, actually, I should play it... you know... Sorry.) Ha ha ha. Yeah... I'm going crazy, it's true. It's a lack of oxygen and piled up homework (homeworkstress). Anywho, yeah, my bad. (*is sheepish*) ((Hey, at least this is another review. Reviewsgood. True story.) Word up, yo.

-me-

This story is pretty good, however, they are only 11 years old. It's kind of... sick, thinking about 11 year olds doing stuff like this. I mean, could they even get it up? I doubt that most 11 year olds could, but, I'm not male so I wouldn't know. I have absolutely nothing against slash, as almost all of my stories are slash, but the whole age thing is a problem, and, form what I've seen, there really isn't much of a plot. Just 11 year old sex... If you are into writing sex scenes, you might want to get a beta to help you. Not that they're bad or anything, they could just use some work.

By no means am I trying to mean or flaming you, I understand from your summary that is your first story. For being a first story, it is remarkably good. There are some writers on this site... well, I don't think that you could call them writers. But your story is good, unlike a lot of stories. You actually know what the word 'grammar' means and you do have a little bit of a plot. The whole age thing is a little bit squickish, though. I mean, you could just make them friends at 11 and more at 12 or 13. Most eleven year olds I know have no idea what sex is and go "Ew!" at the thought of engaging in any type of sexual action with another person, even kissing. Your story just isn't realistic. I mean, at 11, there's no way you could know if you're gay or straight, 'cause those feelings just aren't there.

Other than that though, this is a very respectable story, it's just not my type of story. From the number of reviews you have, I'd guess that you have a lot fans. Congrats! Having over a 150 reviews for your first story is quite an accomplishment! My first story has finally gotten to like, 120 or something. FINALLY. It's been done for a while, so yeah. Once again, good job! And please don't think I'm trying to be mean. Too many authors get angry when people give them constructive critism and take it as a flame, which it's NOT. It's just my opinion and some friendly advice. :)

-truthxinxshadow-

lol awesome

Another great update. you really are a great writer. Please update ASAP!

I LOVE this story!Ron and Harry together...gets me HOT lol!More soon!

WOW, i cant belive you updated! i was so close to deleting this story lol. good chapter, although a bit short, but i cant wait for th next one!

U know, I dont usaly check these things. I'm morwe of a Harry/Tonks person me self. It's ok for a slash story. I'm right there with u with kingdom hearts and dbz. You should write more

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so yeah update before i hunt you down and eat your brain with a spoon!

Omg..

This is like the best fan fic i've read about harry potter so far!

totally loving the pairings and everything !

please please please hurry and make more chapters !

xDD

Update! and you should think about Orgies with Fred/ George/ Harry/ Ron. Defenitly Anel sex. go for it! but Update !

Oh come on! just Up date alredy! i'm sick of looking for a new chapter! RAWER.