Poor Tonks...cant seem to get into Lupins .:)

I absolutely adored this fic. Really, angst is my favourite genre of literature, and this was just... wonderful. Especially how you had certain phrases sort of fugue throughout the story, as if to emphisise your point. Even though this is obvious, the ending was very /powerful/, and I really loved it.

-Raven

*gasp!* Brilliant idea to have Tonks change herself like that. I've never seen this written about in fanfic.

:lol: I love this chapter!

"Wotcher, Remus" Remus groaned, and put a hand to his forehead.

This fic is amazing both visually and in the characterizations of R/T. The struggle of Remus with his wolf is well done.

Okay, that was dark and depressing and is making me wonder whether there are any anti-depressants hiding in the depths of my medicine cabinet. You know, I almost skipped over this one entirely when I saw "song-fic" but something made me take the risk and read. Incredible job if not exactly the ending I want for those two.

This was a very moving story. I loved it.

what a wonderful angst filled piece. I almost feel like crying. I do hope, that in the end Remus gives in (for that matter that you'll continue writing), otherwise I do think I'll cry. Keep writing.

Okay. This is a good merging of your detail/imagery talents and storytelling.

I liked "It would be wise for you to stay away, I think". But at the start and the end there's still a little too much telling, and not enough showing. The middle is where you sing.

Wallowed through the air- great!

The action is great, too- the tea spilling, and scourgify. Him suggesting what Molly would think. Good use of humour, and detail.

Like the Wotcher lead ins, culuminating in Remus groaning just upon hearing the wotcher. Excellent, excellent use of repetition. Very effective.

But then you rush a bit too much into romance and conflict. Her coming too late with the Wolfsbane thus feels contrived- HOWEVER, the following chase and transformation scene is still effective.

I like him saying Move, Tonks more than "I'm a more monster". Because him saying move, Tonks, desperately, is all we need to know.

And then we come to the part where repetition is not used quite as effectively. You have him reject her twice, which for me, didn't quite work. I think if she was going to take a second crack, she'd be more persistent and know what she was getting herself into. It might have worked better, for example, if she took the rejection the first time, and then had to slowly work on him, and then he whammied her with a second rejection- bigger emotional pay off, and for me, makes more sense.

But still- kudos to you for going with a darker ending. So many fanficcers won't do that, because they are afraid of getting the oh no fair! I HATE miserable endings! You SUCK!

Hope this helps.

Viper

Damn - I am actually welling up with tears. You have managed to get me into a ship - I will be darned. I just feel so sorry for Remus - you paint such a heartful portrait of emotional pain. Pure gift. The writing is really evocative and dramatic without being overly so. Just a brilliant story and I wish there was more. I wish Remus did have a Happily-Ever-After...

Another fav. Sincerely.,

wait... end?... NO bad, sad ending, bad :'(

*sniffle*

ok i'm done now...

the story was amazingly good, sad and depressing. it was perfect. Hated the ending tho, but i'll live. i'll read a fluff to make me feel better. that WAS really good tho.

Brava!

~hope

*Sobs* Damn sad endings! Could you make a sequel to this or something?

Oh, I love it! I love Remus. But it's not finish yet, isn't it? I hope not, I want to read more. Bye now, I would write more but here is like 4 in the morning and my mom is going to kill me, kisses.

Lorien Lupin

The first paragraph here was simply brilliant. It's your work at its best.

Oh well, I wanted a happy ending, but it's not really a happy story, and this Remus has a lifetimes worth of trauma and inhibitions built up around himself, in his "shroud" as you so effectively call it.

I don't think I've ever read and reviewed a finished story like this, commenting on several chapters. But it was such a well-done story and didn't have nearly as many reviews as it should have had, so I went through it in segments for reviewing. Hope you don't mind.

Thanks for the read!

I kept waiting for her to scream some sense into him at this point! She's heard it all before. The question is, at this point, what is Tonks afraid of? Because she's obviously just as afraid as Remus but on different planes and for different reasons. Or else, she would fight for him.

You have a lovely way with romantic description that makes this chapter wonderfully poignant despite its angsty undertone.

A night in bed with naked Remus! Hooya! :)