Vulpine means 'of or relating to foxes'. Remus Lupin has a lupine form, 'of or relating to wolves', not a vulpine form. Hence the name "Lupin".

I truly like your story, but Harry is 16 years old in his six schoolyear. Therfore you have some major flaws in your storybuilding.

A brilliant story! Harry's rapid development from average schoolboy to magical powerhouse- respected by the masses and acknowledged leader of magical Britain- laid out in a understandable, clearly developed and reasonable way. Wow! This story didn't just tell the reader a story about what happened but rather laid it out, action by action, how Harry was shaped to use his power and then proceed to win and take command. As an author, you tied up loose ends while laying the grounds for a separate story that while logically following from the first, might be read on its own with minimal background. A fascinating story and one that leaves the reader hoping for more. Huzzah to Yagr of Nar.

I certainly hope Professor Snape has a good cover story about this boat.

It would be too stupid if the whole damn bunch of 'em were nothing but spies... but I'll bet there are more moles and plants in the group than we know about.

You're using a woman. - Laughter!

I might be able to follow her, or apparate with her, or at least have some idea of where this damned murderous revel is to take place. - Draco doesn't have the Mark, and isn't going to visit Voldemort, at least, not with Dumbledore to expose him.

We know Harry's in the Amazon - Exactly false.

GHETFOSPAOPS - It resembles SPEW, only longer and more clumsy.

Narcissa was more than impressed by this. She was frankly amazed.

I can't see why you feel the need to protect him. - Because information spreads too easily. Arthur might not harm him, but Dumbledore will.

Lupin... and Snape. Potter... and Malfoy. And you two. By all that's good in the world, boys, if you actually accomplished that - if you really got that group of people to do anything together toward a common goal, you may well be able to kill that bastard, after all, because you have accomplished a miracle already. - Arthur, don't tell Dumbledore! Darn...

"What they did not tell me was that they have introduced some rather interesting improvements to their warehouse which prevented even my detectors from penetrating those defenses to find Draco Malfoy hidden within. Those rather advanced techniques of concealment would also explain why I have been unable to scrye out the location of the Weasleys' spy-device receiver." - Dumbledore, being the Headmaster of Hogwarts doesn't give you right to invade privacy of others. Every person has right to protect property with wards and invite whomever they want here. Scrying the location of something or somebody without legal justified permission to do so is serious breach of privacy. It should be done by government representative, like detection of underage and accidental magic is done, not by the manipulator who is too strong for his own good.

Harry impatient. And has Voldemort forgotten that Harry throws off Imperio?

So, Harry asked Albus to retire (which Albus later refused), insisted that Albus doesn't not kill him (it seems Albus agreed to this demand), and persuaded Albus it would be better to endorse him as Minister of Magic.

But at the end of it all, he sat alone. - Severus, Remus, where are you?

I believe it might be quite rewarding to spend some time with Albus Dumbledore the magic scholar and the man, and let Albus Dumbledore the Leader of the Free World become the legend he should be.

The oath is awful. Instead of death, it should restrain the person somehow so that Harry could argue against him and persuade him logically, and if it's impossible, turn the person into a Muggle so that he would have to live without magic, and couldn't inflict much damage.

I don't like dictatorship and worshipping. I don't like Harry Potter's army. I don't like quick movements of Harry and pushing of Suggestions onto Remus and Severus. I don't like that Harry is exclusively strong powerful wizard, stronger than either Dumbledore or Voldemort. I understand that different wizards have different power levels, but no level should have only one wizard. Besides, Harry is young, his magic isn't fully developed yet.

He was tired, he was hungry, he was becoming disoriented, his thoughts were going nowhere, and they were becoming more paranoid by the second.

Cassandra

He visualized Saint Mungo's

laughed hard enough that two fell down, and the third still stood helplessly shaking with mirth several minutes after their laughter had begun.

But somehow, someday, he would be removed from his plastic prison and set free once again. - [Sweetly] Wouldn't you thank Harry James Potter for leaving you with difficult-to-destruct body, and wand, however small it is? Though, I admit: unless somebody particularly stupid tranfigures you into another form, you will hardly be able to move or to do magic, you will only be able to observe, reflect and think. It's pretty frustrating, though Harry was merciful: he hasn't taken your magic, or your memories, or snapped your wand.

By the way, where is Nagini?

Bills are being proposed - and passed, using my name as endorsement - that are surprises to me when they become law... that, honestly, I have no real understanding of. It's all too fast, and too much for me, and I need to get some kind of control over it all again, and... and... you're the only person I can trust. - I suspect it was a mistake to keep Constantine, the one who worked with Fudge. He understands mechanics of bureaucracy too well. He probably has ulterior motives. And he is used to inactive Minister who is only interested in being re-elected, not in helping others.

But he knew that, whatever distraction he tried to employ, his mind would return inevitably to his fixation on the hunt. The only way he could free himself now was to complete the task he had taken on, remove from the world those men who were undeserving of the privilege of continued existence within it. Three more to go. - How is this fixation working?

Are you telling there is a sudden population growth? I find that hard to believe, after war. Who lives in the Malfoy Manor, for instance? How many properties each Noble Family has and doesn't use?

That young man needs my help. [You are implying he isn't mature enough to make decisions about governing the country] - I'm sure he does [he isn't invincible]. But I also know that, when you agreed to work for him, when you tied your fortune to his, you took the dragon by the tail: Mister Potter's sheer power is not to be underestimated. He might be content to remain the figurehead of this government [as long as you aren't unfair, unjust to people in the outside world]. He might take some satisfaction in creating Muggle-blinding glamours to hide our new housing developments. But, if he were to decide to impose his will upon us all, he has the sheer power to defeat any champion we might raise against him [so make sure to discuss your decisions with him, so that he understands what is going on].

Too complex to continue. Good luck to Harry, Severus, Remus. Not to Constantine: Byzantine machinations and covering-up are disliked.

That would be an enormous responsibility. - That, Mister Potter, is, I believe, the single most mature statement I have ever heard you utter

Draco ... did, however, know several places in Diagon Alley that would be perfectly happy to extend a Malfoy some credit. - First, how do you get to Diagon Alley from France? It's not only distance but also magical customs (unless wizards don't guard their borders at all). Second, you should not be recognized as Malfoy. You have money - well, use it, but don't be recognized as Malfoy.

And they happen to have a heavily-armored warehouse... - Yes! Twins are brilliant.

he was pleased, and Harry could tell that the professor approved of his answer...You have made remarkable progress, Mister Potter - Praise from Severus Snape is rare, unexpected, and precious.

It was not until his next meeting with the Weasley twins that the phrase 'Un-Necessary Magic' occurred to him, but as soon as he mentioned it to the twin who had toppled the stack of boxes, it became a favorite in-joke between him and George Weasley.

House elves were strange creatures, difficult to understand under the best of circumstances.

a carbonated soda - Ruins teeth. Don't drink regularly.

So a wizard would have to be very comfortable - would have to trust whoever he was with very greatly - in order to put his wand on the table, as mine is. - Agree...

Wolf thinks the idea of the two of you being romantically linked is absurd - Thank you. Harry - Ginny is too stereotypical: pureblood-pureblood, Potter-redhead, Light - Light, Gryffindor-Gryffindor, savior - damsel-in-distress.

Narcissa Black was on board with his program, and was at least tentatively interested in seeing it through to its conclusion.

Draco, Draco, Dragon, Drake,

Brave like Godric Gryffindor,

Bluffing with two redhead twins,

Thinking that he probably wins,

When he is looked for by hunters,

Both Dumbledore and Death Eaters.

What will happen to you, the tracked,

when you leave warehouse of twins?

Will Narcissa know where you went,

How was your time carelessly spent?

That's disgusting. - Ronald!

I'd be happy to eliminate the big guy and let the rest of the bunch just give up and do something else with their lives. - Me, too. Not all of them are murderous.

But when he's done, it's not a mere pile of jokes and foolery that he's accomplished. - First, it's not foolery; it brings money and food to twins, it brings laughter to people, it gives potential weapons to twins' allies. Second, Ministry's work is mostly either pointless or harmful.

But if he could get into Voldy's inner sanctum...Firebomb? More like... Extensible Ear.

Brilliant! Necessary magic made Sepal drunk, so he confessed in front of Dumbledore that he is Voldemort's candidate. Unfortunately, Dumbledore hired this Death Eater, and only due to Ministry Voldemort's plan was stopped.

Harry is a dangerous creature - [Shrieking] Prejudice! Against werewolves, centaurs, vampires, veela, goblins, dwarfs! And anybody unusual!

Power such as his cannot be allowed the freedom of the world without a counterforce as powerful as Voldemort himself to restrain it. - And yours power is allowed? Hypocrite!

That is not merely negligent, that is criminal. - Agree. Unless he turned him into a spy?

Next time I do, I will be sure to mention that I do not find it appropriate for Hogwarts to hire a student without giving him some compensation. - Harry didn't want to be hired, and Professor Sprout didn't want to hire him, so no compensation is needed. At least, not from Professor Sprout. And the Headmaster is too powerful to be bothered by such pettiness as stipend. Weasleys, for some reason, are interested in making money, though it's not polite; Harry isn't.

Now he sounds like bloody Percy. - Ron is too prejudiced to be good friend.

"Headless chickens!" Fred exclaimed, his face alight with inspiration. "Ectoplasmic? Hallucinatory? Remote control?" "Why not all three?" - Agree. Welcome.

The Headmaster made as if to speak. His eyes widened in shock as his jaw refused to move. Involuntarily, he took a step backward. Then another. - Good. Dumbledore deserves fright and more from Harry for putting him into abusive house, keeping knowledge about magic from him, putting his godfather into jail, probably setting up his parents to be murdered, restraining his magic, keeping information (like prophecy) from him, not giving him adequate teaching in Occlumency, rewarding him for each foolish stupidly brave action, leaving him ignorant of magical world, culture, traditions, setting him up to be a martyr.

We are out of time. - Agree. Dumbledore has to be removed out of the picture soon, he knows too much about Harry and his magic.

Thank you, Sir. I appreciate your candor

Snape, already surprised, was astounded. Harry Potter, heaping sarcasm on himself? And doing so with an innocent-faced smile?

his face was bright red - As it should be. But it's better than lying.

Remus was to thank all that was holy that Harry Potter had never decided to become a musician. - Terrible. Disrespectful. Childish? Cruel?

I'm glad Harry apologized. I don't like how this magic 'doesn't allow' a mage to quit. I'm glad magic isn't separated into Light and Dark magic (world isn't black and white), like Voldemort - Dark Lord and Dumbledore - current Light Lord and Potter - future Light Lord, but I'm disappointed Potter will be forced into leadership. And I'm surprised that Dumbledore outwardly wants Potter to die.

He had to get back to England again. - At least, use twins' wards.

A feeling of dread gripped him, which was very puzzling, because he couldn't recall exactly what they had been talking about.

Will Professor Sepal be back on campus today? - You should have asked where is he now.

You have two employees here who are collaborators with He Who Must Not Be Named. - One! Another 'Death Eater' is spy, betraying Voldemort despite the danger.

You will definitely not be returning to Hogwarts for your sixth year. - Home study, early NEWTs?

I won't be returning to Hogwarts either. - What will the Headmaster and Voldemort know?

Why do you need address? Owls find person without address, unless powerful wards are used.

And still she laughed.

Why was everything so insane?

Do twins-Slytherins and Draco-Gryffindor know Mind Arts?

save the Headmaster's skin by wrestling him away from a dangerous plant... - The Headmaster mocks him, he knows the plant very well.

Have you no respect? Yes, you have no respect? No, you have no respect? - Yes or no, you don't win. It was all sadly pointless.

Then, the Dark Lord was laughing, sounding genuinely amused. It is thinking like that which keeps our people alive!

Draco, congratulations! Dark Lord's insanity or something else, but the Ear is planted.

Professor, if a Ministry official really needed to fly, he could use a broomstick. - Which can be burned, jinxed, summoned, broken, confiscated...

And invisibility is simply unethical...Criminals and spies are the only ones I can think of off the top of my head. - Aurors and spies, exactly. Inivisibility cloak can be summoned or lost and cannot hide several separate people. Potions can wear out, but at the same time they can be produced in larger quantities.

I can teach the children how to brew difficult, dangerous, nearly useless potions. - They are rarely used, but they aren't useless; they are unique as works of art. The new Potions Professor is childish, and I doubt she has ever created a new potion, or done potions research.

Come on, future Conqueror of the World, you have work to do and enemies to avoid

I remember it differently - What about giving these memories for others to see?

It's like a radio broadcast. Clear, loud, detailed... the thing is...Bugged the Dark Lord

The revelation that he had also allowed Neville Longbottom to continue taking Potions classes when he could have easily rid himself of the boy had upset their notions of the man, however. And what was even more difficult to picture, the new Professor seemed to think that Snape was some kind of adventure hero!

definitely improved Malfoy model

I was afraid of this. I will have to ride it out. - What is it? Lucius's death, or forcing Mark onto Draco through Lucius?

Dumbledore successfully weakens Fudge. When will Severus, Harry and Remus attack Dumbledore, to prevent him from taking too much power? And then attack already weakened Fudge? Very well, you want to train Harry before taking part in the fight where Dumbledore, Fudge and Voldemort weaken each other.

Harry felt his headache begin just listening to the description of the exercise...the real problem...to overcome was control.

fascinating

People's memories are short. - No, some people have extremely long memories.

Ignore the office-holders. They're all insane...

We have to see the Headmaster. - Hermione! You trust authorities too much.

The frustration at being unable to apply standard magical study to the phenomenon of Harry's magic was etched into Snape's face.

I trust you, and I believe in you, and I think you're the smartest, most competent wizard I've ever seen - Agree.

Snape was chuckling. And then it became unmistakable. The potions professor was shaking with mirth, his shoulders twitching, his chest pumping up and down in time to his laughter. And then Snape closed his eyes, opened his mouth, and for the first time in Harry's experience, Severus Snape laughed out loud.

No, when I look for such satisfaction, I find it in power.

So we keep him safe, so that he may, eventually, step up and take his turn at being killed. It is so depressing that it hardly bears thinking on.

And Harry Potter might just be the perfect point at which our ambitions come together.

Draco. Is. Spoiled. But the serious trouble he is in might make him mature.

He had met a beautiful woman, who was also a great flyer. But she was a nobody, essentially a jockey for the local Club, her sponsor. - And Draco Black is a nobody, formerly Draco Malfoy, fugitive.

Couldn't combination of 'Weasley Clock' and 'the Map' allow Professor Snape and Remus Lupin know where Harry is when he is in mortal danger? Preferably, extended version of the Map, which could find him anywhere in Britain, and not be fooled.

If Greg could convince Potter to join the Death Eaters with Goyle as his sponsor, rather than Vincent - then it would be Goyle who led the new generation of the Dark Army, and Crabbe would be the one taking orders from him.

If bloody Chaz knew this... not to mention all those girls... then Voldemort must have had it in mind when he told Vince to recruit Potter. - It seems Voldemort doesn't have effective information gathering network. Probably because children pass information easier, as illustrated by this 'rumour'.

And they had worn their school robes, so that if they were spotted on campus, they would not look out of place. - Summer any students except Harry will look out of place.

Both men were experienced in magical fighting. Each was an accomplished duelist. And either one was powerful and knowledgeable enough to teach an effective Defense Against the Dark Arts class. Neither man had ever seen a defense such as the one Harry Potter employed.

Snape cringed. The foolish utterance was not a spell... not even a real Latin word. The attempt at making magic with it was doomed to failure. To Severus' amazement, the vaguely green-glowing curse heading Potter's way seemed to strike his wand - and immediately reversed direction, slamming into the boy who had cast it.

Shockingly, so did the other three brooms.

The store of soil had not been hexed, or cursed, or - in a proper sense - enchanted. The magic with which it was imbued was raw, unformed, and in such a state, completely immune to Finite Incantatem, or any of the simple 'turn it off' types of spells. As irritating as it was for them, the three adults were all glad they had discovered the situation right away. Leaving this kind of magic lying about in something as malleable as a pile of soil was a little like leaving dynamite lying about without any detonators nearby. Any idiot who happened by could initiate a tremendous amount of devastation.

Crabbe, Goyle and Malfoy - Crabbe and Goyle: yes, though only one of them has spoken with Voldemort. Malfoy: Harry's speculation.

No one...would have believed...Potter's story. - Memories.

Professor Sprout was generally supportive of her students, but this particular boy had already been much more trouble than he was worth. - Not his fault he attracts trouble.

I notice that - one - you are fully aware of Potter being attacked. You are certainly not surprised by what I just told you. And - two - that you only show up once the difficult work of disenchanting that entire huge mound of soil has been completed. And what makes me really angry is that I told you this would happen. The first time - the very first time - I send him outside, out of my direct sight, he attracts a quartet of hoodlums who cast curses all over my storage area, and spill wild magic all over my clean soil!

Potter is a perfectly acceptable student. That is not what I need in a summer worker! I am scheduled to leave here in two weeks, Albus. When I go, I want to leave my work behind me...I have to know that my - LIVING - charges are being taken care of properly. Albus, Potter can't do it. He's a good fifth year student. But he is not capable of managing a Herbology department single-handedly - especially if he is going to be assaulted by flying curse-casters every time he steps outside. I need someone who can actually respond to the needs of the living subjects here in this department. I need Neville Longbottom, Headmaster, and no one else will do.

Pomona, I would love to indulge your desires. - Not desires, but necessities.

I cannot have two students on campus during the summer. - So you can have one student here with three minders, and you cannot have another student who doesn't need minders and doesn't attract trouble?

Dumbledore was, for the first time in Pomona Sprout's memory, absolutely speechless. He stared at her in shock, apparently uncertain of what to do.

So, Dumbledore suspects, and Remus and Severus know, how Harry can use pure magic, not with words, but with intent, and Remus and Severus want to train him.

And yet, you do not know what I am talking about when I mention 'Magic Theory.' - Most students don't, now, these years.

And it's a low tactic to try to pin it on Harry. - It is.

The worst beating I ever got was for fighting. - I'm wondering why Harry only now speaks aloud about the abuse.

I wonder, why does Dumbledore antagonize Harry only now?

Staying for summer...Abused by Muggles...Capable of wandless magic of intent...Hating Dumbledore...Snake speaker...So many similarities with Tom Marvolo Riddle, and only one difference from Voldemort: sanity and wish to not hurt others, innocents.

Dumbledore... I simply don't have enough fury inside me to match his manipulative evilness.

Actually, free time was the last thing Harry wanted right then. He would have preferred to go back to the greenhouses, or go for magical testing with Remus and Snape... anything except lay about in his room and think of Professor Sprout quitting, or Dumbledore spying on the entire castle, or Voldemort holding a 'Kill Harry Potter' contest.

Harry began to realize that his child's-eye view of the school was not necessarily accurate. And his impression that Dumbledore was the unquestioned leader of all good wizards and witches was particularly flawed.

They had probably lost their testing facility. It would not be safe to return to Malfoy Manor again. But Harry felt that, with the spell he had cast when he believed that he was facing Voldemort, he had passed the magical ability test with flying colors. - I wouldn't be so sure. It destroyed the boggart, but would it destroy Voldemort? At the very least, he could try to dodge it.

What kind of workout room can be destroyed by workout?

But why go into hiding... unless they are planning something that ought to concern our Order? - To avoid the war altogether. To avoid Draco getting the Dark Mark.

But both of the Malfoys have reason to hate the Ministry, now - Hatred towards the ineffective corrupted Ministry, and evilness, aren't the same, at all.

The only possible explanation for my complete inability to find the Malfoys is that they are being shielded by a power nearly as great as my own. - Or that they are outside Britain. But as long as your misconception prevents you from finding them, fine.

Please, Albus. Don't involve the Order in this hunt for two pathetic, broken people. It's not worth our time. - Agree.

It is the most important thing we can do at this time. - And what about fighting Voldemort? Destroying his Horcruxes? Arresting his Death Eaters? Enacting laws supporting werewolves and vampires so that they wouldn't join Voldemort?

We'll search. With the boy. - I hope it will give them opportunity to train Harry and do something useful.

But he had lied. Directly to Voldemort. And had survived. For the first time, he began to believe that his desperate plan might have some chance of success.

It was disconcerting to Harry to realize how much effort the man was putting into looking out for him. And it spoiled the illusion of casual relaxation that Remus maintained in his posture and easy conversation.

First, you destroyed the boggart. A group of people who know what they are doing can destroy one. But only in certain ways. You blew that one into a fine mist! And then destroyed the mist! You completely, utterly eradicated it. I would have been impressed if you had done that to a fly, let alone a giant. But a boggart... that's impressive!

That room was especially made to withstand the most violent spell that Lucius Malfoy could ever possibly cast. There were two layers on top of the reinforced walls of that room. One layer that was magic reflective, and a layer beneath that one that was magic absorbing. But when you cast your spell against the boggart you believed to be Voldemort, you not only evaporated the magic-reflective layer, and destroyed the magic-absorbing layer - you smashed through the reinforced concrete and dug a tunnel deep into the solid rock surroundings! That room was shock-protected well enough to contain a dynamite explosion, and you set off every alarm in the house above. Do you have any idea how much power something like that requires?

So, a lot of power, and lack of control.

He had planned for so long to kill Voldemort that in his mind, once that goal had been accomplished, everything would be better. - Voldemort is symptom, result, not reason, not cause.

he couldn't have two students staying at the castle over the summer - Why not?

Now you have me planning to take over the world. - Not to take over the world as dictator, just prevent the world from controlling you and inflicting injustice upon you, and your friends and others.

Harry walked in silence, but his mind was working furiously.

The boy merely looked worried, which was a positive sign when compared to the pompous overconfidence Snape had expected.

And, you must take over his organization - Harry James Potter, the Dark Lord, right, at your service, going to make the world, or, at least, Britain, better.

The power I tested in the Malfoy Manor was greater than that I have ever seen in anyone, D

your success in not being killed by a weakened, crippled Lord Voldemort. - Low blow. First, Harry hasn't expected being attacked when he took the Cup, so he allowed Wormtail to Stupefy him; then, he was bound and without wand; later, brother wands managed to pause the duel so that Harry would be able to get the Cup and escape - did you really expect that student should duel against the Dark Lord when he cannot even apparate, whilst Voldemort could use apparition during the duel if need arised.

If you do not go to your family's home, Death eaters will take you within a week. - What about living inside Potters' vault? Goblins have excellent protection.

Threat with Dementors - Aren't Dementors controlled by Voldemort by now?

While this building may well be the most magically-warded edifice in the world, and whereas our grounds may constitute the most magically-protected piece of property on the planet, your safety is hardly ascertained if you are alone. - Dumbledore, if you are so powerful wizard, why haven't you prevented Quirrell from being inside Hogwarts, why haven't you destroyed the diary as soon as this object of Dark Magic entered the grounds? You just want Harry to fight against Voldemort as frequently as possible, so that either of them would die at the hands of the other.

In Harry's place, I wouldn't agree to be forced to take Neville's job away from him. I wouldn't use my status as boy-who-lived against Neville. Neville is my friend, and he is much better with plants. I would go to Dursleys, and tolerate them for one more summer, and do it until I have official permission to use magic outside school. And if Dursleys don't allow me inside house, I would sleep in the park, and look for a part-time work, nearby. Well, at least, Neville is no longer so angry at Harry. They will stay friends, especially if Harry manages to take good care of the plants.

I will be assigning Professor Snape to keep a close watch over you, and to make sure you remain safe. Please cooperate with him in any way that will make his job easier and more efficient. - And what about Voldemort? If he reads this piece of information from Harry's mind, he will just ask his Death Eater to bring Harry to him.

It's explosive mix! Professor Snape dislikes both Harry and Remus, and Harry dislikes Professor Snape.

So first you attempted to reject Harry's request by saying he will not find enough babysitters, and now you give him three people as babysitters/lifeguards. The only difference is that you forced Harry to agree to take Neville's rightful place.

He only knew that he felt bad about Neville, and worried about being under the direct supervision of Snape.

pathetic

like Harry Potter... - Well, it might even be possible. It would definitely protect Harry from death (though he wouldn't care much for this), most likely protect his friends from death (unless Death Eaters act in self-defense), probably but unlikely protect innocent Muggles from death.

Dumbledore's not a student - Not as idiotic as you may think. In youth, Dumbledore was a Dark Lord's friend. Now, he is a Lord in his own right, though most consider him Light, he is still evil in his manipulations.

He still didn't understand why Snape was so upset. The burnt old bugger on the throne had seemed to like the suggestion to snag Potter for the Death Eaters. One thing was sure, it probably wasn't a suggestion he heard very often, and that had to count for something. Being a Deatheater was all about doing your own thing and saying to Hell with the rules. ... He had forgotten how to cut loose and raise Hell. That's why Voldemort wanted young people for his army - they would have the spirit he wanted.

And if you hurt any of them, Potter, I will hurt you. If you ruin anything... then, God help you.

If he could keep Neville on his side...

You need some time to enjoy your summer! - No need. Hogwarts will be better than Dursleys, and working with Sprout will be better than gardening.

He chose his victims carefully. He would take the entire month between changes to select the worst individual he could find. In one year, he had rid London of a dozen violent criminals. The next year, he chose bastards of a different type. But overall, his twelve years of lycanthropy in the English capital had been something of which he was very proud. "Yes, I killed people... but they were all bad."

Now, he was the alpha.

Thank you. I will do this. Draco will protest, but he will go.

because there are so many magical ways to thwart the process of execution. - Use magic-suppressing field or shackles. Or throw through the veil.

If there were ever a night during which he was expected to use five portkeys, he might well apparate himself to America and live as a muggle.

What was particularly sad was that this old liar was Britain's... and ultimately, the world's... greatest defense against Voldemort - and anyone who, like Voldemort, would enslave and destroy rather than nurture and build.

Old Tom 'I am Lord' Voldemort was insane, impractical - and worst of all, had no plan beyond seizing power. His followers all thought they knew his plan. The disproof of that could be effected simply by asking any two of them, separately, what the plan was.

But though he was an undeservedly famous, spoiled brat, Potter did seem to have a positive genius for getting the better of Lord Voldemort. So Severus had finally come to accept the use of the boy as a tool. But the man who wielded that tool? Lying, manipulative Dumbledore? Snape had become less and less sure of his loyalty to that man and his cause as the years had passed. Besides, Snape had joined the Death Eaters in order to follow a vision of a better world, a world based on structure and discipline, in which those who were intelligent, creative and driven would be rewarded commensurately with their intelligence, creativity and drive. Dumbledore, for all his anti-Voldemort efforts, seemed to be bent on making a world safe for mediocrity, in which the average was praised, the ordinary was exemplified, the normal enshrined as the goal to which to aspire. Too late, years into his double agency, spying on Dumbledore for Voldemort and on Voldemort for Dumbledore, Snape realized that he wanted neither of those men's dreams to come true. 'If there were only another alternative,' he mused. 'Another leader, as determined as Riddle, as devious as Dumbledore, as powerful as...' Who? Who could be the exemplar of power that could check Voldemort's excesses and discipline Dumbledore's laxity?

Snape may serve two masters in a political sense, but neither of those two powerful wizards could begin to perform as brilliantly as Snape in the field of potion brewing. In that light, Snape was the acknowledged authority on all things potion related, and Dumbledore had just tread upon the wrong floorboard when he suggested house elves be employed in the potions dungeon.

Dumbledore could skirt the truth with the best diplomats in the world, but when he turned to lies as bald as this one certainly was, he was always ready to unload something truly awful.

We will ensure that the Boy Who Lived... continues to do so. - If you are so sure in the prophecy, only Voldemort can cause Harry's death. And since Harry has already faced Voldemort alone several times, and each time survived, whether escaping from situation or killing his opponent, lifeguards are not necessary.

Harry felt horrible, more like a burden than a potentially helpful worker.

Snape was impressed despite himself.

Harry was doomed before he started.

Sometimes, being very stupid allowed someone like Vince to see the simplest things more clearly - the sorts of things that smarter blokes passed over. Who would be interested in a pair of almost-sixth-year schoolboys on the floo to one another? Probably no one.

When Vincent Crabbe started making sense, it was time to check outside the windows for flying pigs and book your ski trips to Hell. But Vince had made sense, in a weird way. Potter was probably sick and tired of all the 'famous' he already had.

About the spy-eye: why is it so difficult to make protection automatic and less intrusive? Like, put on Harry Potter: tracking charm (which would alert when Harry is outside normal places: greenhouse, dormitory, library, kitchens, Great Hall; especially when Harry is close to the wards), magical signature detecting charm (which would alert about any new wizard who doesn't belong to school), non-wizard detecting charm (against not belonging to Hogwarts Muggles, snakes, house elves, vampires, werewolves), spell detecting charm (creating automatic absorbing shield and alarming about an attack; some parameters to allow healing spells). Assign a house elf, like Dobby: he will be quite efficient protection, able to apparate inside Hogwarts, and will not be angry about being distracted from other work.

Dumbledore aims to leave Harry without friends, doesn't he?

Crabbe would not be getting the Boy Who Lived to join the Death Eaters this summer, if Gregory Goyle had anything to say about it. - Amusing.

No... no one actually said I couldn't leave the grounds... - Lupin is already looking for danger. Not that Hogwarts wards are particularly safe... But at least person can be found here due to the Map.

So Snape wants to put a baby monitor on me - Not as bad as it could be. And it could be distracting and dangerous for him, especially when he discusses Harry with Voldemort.

I do not trust Albus Dumbledore. - Harry should have known it better than anybody else.

And I've already said you were the best Defense teacher we ever had! Dumbledore was right about those things. He gave you the chance. - He should have passed laws about werewolves' equality instead of condescending to Remus.

The idea of irritating Snape - isn't welcome by me.

You prepare ground for Harry, Remus and Severus taking the third side, but Harry is too brain-washed, now.

Good luck.

This story is so good that I had to put it on my favorites before finishing it and I never do that. You have gone far from the beaten path and yet stuck close to canon facts. I have never seen Snape run off and enjoy beating up Slytherin miscreants, yet it is believable and works. His whole motivation as a power voyeur is strange and compelling. Fairly dark but not crazy Remus is also new. I've seen a few stories try to get into what makes a werewolf tick but a large number of them get bogged down in the whole mating thing. Your take is interesting but not overblown. And I feel for Harry, being trained the way he really should have been, after years of being stifled. I look forward to the myriad of new tortures you have in store.

Oh dear God..."apparate air"... I'm embarrassed to even read it.

Ofc, the wizard/witch will 'hug' the air then apparate it.

Or maybe you make apparition without physical contact? You'll open another can of worms. Just think how easy would be to kidnap someone.

*sighs* I'll try to forget ever reading something like that and try to ignore such ideas if I find any in the future chapters.

I have to admit that I found this story exceptionally exasperating in the first few chapters. While I don't want to quibble with your choice of secondary character development, I thought Harry to be rather dull and immature for a lead. And then I thought to myself that I was hardly a prize intellectual at 15, (not that I would be, now, five years later). I suppose I have simply been spoiled from years of reading Super!Harry stories, where a 11 to 17 year old Harry Potter is astoundingly perceptive, powerful, intelligent, cunning, and ideal in every way.

Your Harry is deep, full of potential, but at the same time, acts painfully like the child he is supposed to be. Not in terms of facile dialogue, as most authors employ to characterize children. Rather, you weave a Harry who is truly young and naive of the world, who strives to learn but truly has been 'sheltered' from what the adults around him already know and strive to mold him into. Although I am surprised at the depths of the cunning Remus, it is certainly a nice change from caring, wallflower Remus who shows up in most AU Harry fics.

I honestly found the first few chapters of this story painful. I've said it before, and I'll say it again. But I suppose that is more than made up for by the quality of your work. Manipulative!Dumbledore is by no means an original plot, and you know that. But your characterization and the depths and development potential of these characters makes your story truly irresistable.

I continue onwards :)

You have long chapters, a good writing stile, a more or less resonable story with some new twists in it and there is no plot device I particulary dislike...I should like you story, but I don't. And I think, I have finally realized why.

You choose to write in an epic style. That is absolutely okay. To stay with different characters can be very interesting. But IF you are doing it, you have to take care that you are writing about the exiting parts. If you are describing every little detail every character does, it gets very fast boring because you need to much time before you come to the dramatic or action packed part. You can easily get away with writing down every thought and gesture if you are writing about one or two characters, but as soon as you have more than three you should shorten, skip or summarize the boring parts (like the very long discussion between Snape and Narcissa, the discussion between Remus and Harry, the discussion between Dumbledore and Harry, Malfoy at Beauxbatons aso) or you have in the end 4. long chapters before anything remotely enthralling happens (not that I think what was in the first 4 chapters was unimportant, but is was defintetly to drawn out).

The other problem is the way you are lecturing your readers. So you obviously think that Hermione could have come together with Harry under other circumstances but Ginny is totally unsuitable for him. Nice to know, but it really has no bearing for the story itself. And I really don't see why Ginny is mentioned at every opportunity, just to give you the opportunity to reinforce the point. Not, that you have a point because you don't give any explanation for your opinion which would make the lecturing perhaps slightly more bearable. Similiar is the speech about Dumbledore: You say he was watering down the education, but you don't explain how he is supposed to have done that. You are making a big explanation how Harry is Voldemorts real fiend, but you are totally ignoring the fact that Voldemort was around long before Harry was born and that Dumbledore fought with him for seven years (not to mention the fact that Dumbledore is the defeater of Grindelwald). You say that it is better when Snape watches Harry too, because Remus does not trust Dumbledore, but you don't explain why another watcher would help or why Snape should be more trustworthy than Dumbledore. You are like a parent who tells his child that it will like to go to school and if the child ask why, answers: Because I told you so!

I thought that your story was brilliant. It was full of intrigue and subplots that kept me going even after recieving death threats from all immediate family members for hogging the computer. The writing itself contained a maturity that most fanfiction writers don't imploy and made me feel childish in my attempts at writing anything at this scale(note: I haven't posted anything yet i'm writing most of it on paper first).

If Yagr wasn't such a weird name, i'd name my first child after you.

Hoping for a sequel,

Cjon the Bloodletter

Oh, my *god*. The dance of the bludgers. I still can't tell you why I can't get into the earlier chapters, but this whole scene was so absolutely *perfect* that it was stunning. Wow! On another front, why does it seem to escape everyone's attention that if Harry considers the Weasley's family, that looking at Ginny as an object of sexual attraction might feel more than a little incestuous? Especially after the outright statement he made to Remus. That has the potential of going so very, very badly. And if George and Fred don't rethink anything they are planning after the results of getting Harry drunk, they are thicker than I thought they were. Oy vay. {Zafaran wanders off shaking her head} Zafaran

I've a horrid confession to make. I'm skimming this story. For some reason, and I can't figure out why, I cannot get engaged in the story. I want to find out what happens, and I'll skim all the parts to pick out the Harry parts and anything I run across that triggers a second look, but it's just not holdingg my interest. Which is a terrible thing to tell a writer. All the parts that make up the story are competently done, that not the problem. The plot is nicely complex, you've got detailed world-building, I happen to like what you're doing with Harry, Snape, and Lupin, and I agree with your viewpoint on Dumbledore being a meglomaniac and severe control freak, though it may be shown a bit too baldly and intensively. Everything in the sections I'm reading are things I really enjoy, but there's just something about the collective whole that's just not doing it for me. Sorry. If I could figure out what it is that's bothering me, I'd offer information on just why it's bothering me, but I can't get the reason to jell beyond it's just not working for me. Zafaran

You are a decent writer, at that. But you make a serious mistake that, unfortunately, makes this long story become a long log of shit: you assume that you're smart and right. Those are not assumptions you can afford to make.

The surprising thing is that, although you're clearly not stupid, you adhere to the "evil Dumbledore" school of thought. There's one serious problem with this, which you have run into over and over again this chapter, somehow without noticing that you're running into a brick wall. Dumbledore has done nothing wrong, as your very own Harry Potter observed this chapter, and though you have spent paragraph after paragraph explaining exactly what he has done wrong, you've come up with nothing except "he's manipulative."

You spent a lot of time making Snape THOROUGHLY out of character just so he could expound cheap philosophy to Harry. That's a problem the better writers learn to stay away from. Unfortunately, your philosophy is also wrong-it makes no sense. The absolutely ridiculous "DUMBledore is EVIL" part aside, the Percy segment made no sense whatsoever (being an asshole and a stickler to the rules is not, no matter how forcefully you say it, "THE SAME DAMN THING" as torturing and killing people in the name of alien morality-you have to share at least some of that morality, and morality is entirely different from rule-following).

In any case, try not to talk down to people, because it makes you look like an asshole. You can't afford to look like an asshole when what you're saying is, well, wrong.

-Really Bad Fanfiction