this was amazing! it made me smile so much. great writing and plot, keep up the good work!

Whoa! This is great IMO. I thoroughly enjoyed your story. It flows so well, and your descriptive writing is great. You made it very easy to see the scenes. This line; “As he instructed, Ben was amazed at how truly intimate this was.” Oh that’s good, and I was thinking the exact same thing; the chess lessons were turning me on. I love the roll reversal, teacher student idea. Brilliant! I hope you do more.