ummm... Don't really know what to say, greatest and shortest fic I've read but its really sweet and I 3 it!

so sweet and different!

*Sniffle*

I do like this story-idea, but I find it worth noting that I have seen this same story, nearly word-for-word (names changed), by another author. I'm not sure who actually wrote it (though I'm assuming you did, because the date of updating is earlier for your version). The other story is called "Final Distance", under the Kingdom Hearts section, and features the Yuffie/Squall pairing. The author is "I call this laughable", and he/she didn't make any reference to you/your story. Anyway, I just wanted to mention this. Interesting story though!

Beautiful. Absolutely beautiful.

Oh...wow...that was...totally awesome. Very very excellent write. I'm kinda still trying to get my jaw to stay up.

~Artee

are you going to keep this as a one shot or...? I think it would make a great story

I know I was a fan before of your work...but I am more now than ever. That was great, you actually got a tear out of me.

~Artemis

So, where's Pan going in two days?

It seems rather sad.

But, anyhoo, swell story!

Very sweet, very tender. I can almost feel the love between them. Does make me wonder though why she leaves, what for. Lovely story.

That was a beautiful stary beautifully written. i hope you write more.

Okay, After reading, yet another of your beautiful, enchanting, mesmerizing, enligtening stories. I have assume your a Mariah fan! She has a song called underneath the stars and it subtly reminds me of this story. And she has a song called butterfly and the last few lines of this story are basically what its about.

Man your clever, I LURVE YOU WORK!

I hope that if you decide to leave that you will keep on writing. I sense a JKR junior here!

Mwuah!

Lady Ly

That was a good short One-shot story. Though the rating should be PG-13 because of the content you have in here. But I've found a few problems you might want to know, if you were to ever revise. Well, here goes:

You have:

15 Weak sentences

10 Incomplete sentences

10 Second-Person Address

9 Subject-Verb agreement

6 Adverb errors

5 Paragraph problems

5 Wordy sentences

4 Passive Voice

4 Spelling (though it's acceptable because of some names)

3 End-of-sentence preposition

3 Homonym

3 Object of Verb

3 Sentence Variety

2 Punctuation

1 Colloquial

1 Comma slice or Fused sentence

1 Formalism

1 Incorrect Verb form

1 Missing modifier

1 Noun phrase

1 Pronoun case

1 Question mark

1 Redundant

1 Subjunctive

1 Tense shift

Those are all of the mistakes I've found. I don't want it to seem like I'm a hater of some type. I'm just offering some tips for the future of any story you might have.

Though, on most of your stories, I found it very wordy and rhetorical. Too many, I'm afraid. There's no main plot. There are sub plots but no main plot. You might want to look into that, if you can.

This isn't a 'flame' but some tips. I personally think (no offense) that if you cut RainWater in half you wouldn't miss a thing because there's too much detail. It's not focusing on the plot. That makes it hard for me, particularly, to understand if there's a main plot or not. Don't try too hard. The length isn't the importance, it's how well you manage the plot.

I hope this helps. Happy New Years

~The Unknown~

as usual, you evoke deep emotions within me with just this 1,713-word fic. It was awesome, but sad.

Anyways, you've always been a favorite author and I'm proud to say I've read all of your fics.

And just like what everyone had been telling you, I hope you'll finish Never Say Never sometime in the near future.

For me, it was your best, ever. A masterpiece...

Wow, that was awesome, just like always! you have some of the best writing talent i've ever read in my life. you're stories are always full of imagery and colorful language, and it's fantastic to read your stuff. Great job