could you finish this story?

it 2010 right now when are you going to updatew this story?

AWESOME! PLEASE UPDATE THIS! I LOVE IT!

more chapters please.

what the hell is Ranma? a were-what? i have never heard of it before. nice story thus far.

Not bad, beside from a few grammer mistakes here and there. The only thing I am wondering about is the time frame of Ranma's life since he is ten thousand years old.

Anyway, I'll be watching this

Later

Some mistakes:

Chapter 00:

...filled with tune, meat, milk...

...filled with tuna, meat, milk...

He sat down i nthe bed and...

He sat down in the bed and...

...and warmer the nusually, plus the fact...

...and warmer then usually, plus the fact...

(Strype Gia is nearly right it's Strype 'Gia)

The werecat the ntook a deep breathe...

The werecat then took a deep breathe...

Chapter 01:

...got a lucky shoot and killed him...

...got a lucky shot and killed him...

...head began to spi nand she said.

...head began to spin and she said.

That's it.

One question though... How can it be that 'Ranma' is about 10 years old, when Ranma was born in the 20th century? Did he time travel or what? xD

Amusing tale, well told so far.

The characters of Ranma have been altered enough so that it really should be an 'original' work, not a fanfic. Doesn't make it less worth reading, just less Ranma-ish.

Mike

This needs work. First of all, Brit ins't strong enough to crush a diamond with her bare hand. The idea that Stripe would cheat on her is rather over used as well.

Ranma the were-whatever. This idea wore thin after the third fanfic that used the idea, which was the forth posted R/GD fic. This idea alone had me cringing. On top of that, he's ten thousand years old...why bother calling him Ranma? Oo

Taxzombie is right, this is an outline, not a fic. You need to work to expand this story. I've found, as a general rule, that you shouldn't change scenes until the scene is at least three pages long. This forces one to expand on details and work on story flow and conversations.

Work on Detail, then expand, then do it again, then expand, and then see if there is any detail that needs to be added. Can't stress that enough.

I'm disappointed in the story, but it has potential, you just need to work on it and think some scenes through. Good luck

Well its always nice to see a Ranma/Gold Digger Crossover, but this seems to be rushed to me.

While we all like to get to the meat of the story we want to write, it often takes a few chapters of story to bring everything up to speed.

You have an easily workable story, all that is needed is some work on slowing down the story and allowing it to flow freely rather than the rushed feeling its giving off.

Of course there are also some minor grammer errors that are easily fixed with a bit of proof reading.

Brother Angelon

I can only say two words:

MORE PLEASE!

Uh, No need to tell the freaking tale. TOo long and I doubt you have the time which doesn't matter. And damn, is Ranam avoiding sexual shit or what? 10,0 year old and still a freaking virgin? I would have a heart attack if i hear something like and tease him about it.

To me this makes a better outline then it does a story. It comes arcoss to me as very rushed.

I think that you should have spent a great deal more time on detail, filling it out instead for basically kicking it into overdrive and burning rubber to get it to where you want to be.

One of the main pleasures of reading a story is just that, reading the story. I don't feel that I've been reading a story with this, more like highlights with a little coversation thrown in on occassion.

As to your main character 'Ranma' I'm sorry but I just don't see the Ranma from the series in him. Other then the name itself that is.

Yes, he knows the Nekoken, BUT it he did not learn it in anything like the 'traditional' manner, he was trained, what training he did have in the proper manner so there's no humor attachment to his method. No curse, no martial arts, not even a Saotome. So he's got the name but for me, he's not Ranma.

Then there is the huge problem you've got with the timeline. At one point he's a two year old wondering around in the woods (which in and of itself is just to much, suspense of reality is one thing fracturing it is another), then he's a four year old that rescues Ryuma Saotome from the pit and takes him to Tokyo and a hospital then becomes a Saotome via adoption. Ok, fine, even if I let the two year old living in the woods pass we're talking mondern times here. Tokyo, hospital, high school, college. YET, 'Ten minutes later' 'Ranma' is proclaiming the fact that he's 10,0 years old. That don't fly.

I'm sorry but while I am always happy to see someone try a GD/Ranma crossover unfortunately, just like so many others I've seen this one fails to measure up for me.

I suggest you start over, considerably flesh it out an resubmit it. Others appear to care for it and that's fine. Continue to write for them. Me I pass.

Good Luck.

GREAT CHAPTER! That is one way to stop her from faint _

Interesting start