A very intresting story, I think you need a rerun of what was to be, I'll start with Mist or would you rather Zack (ofical information about a guy much like Mist so I put two and two together and figured it out).

Here's his true story:

Years ago at the direct time before Mist was transformed he was sent to Elicoor II for a secret reason that his father didn't tell his twin and Zack was forced to go under a force name, he trained there with Nel and Clair and became a good sword fighter, they believed that because of the way he appeared before them that he was from Greeton since it had the best technology. When he was picked up he had found out that his twin had had research done to him and from his twin the researchers had found the three symbols from the three parts of his symbol which controled Attack, Defence and speed. However the researchers also found two main energy sources, the spirit of Chaos and the core of Omega, Omega's cores were placed as energy in Zain(Zack's twin)'s cells and from making this ultimate weapon from the cores of the ultimate lifefore they decided that though Zain was a power that could stand up to the creator as there backup plan they needed to balance his power out with Omega's oposit only then would they have a duo that would stand up to the Enforcers, they had to match Omega's perfection with the violence of Chaos. So Zack/Mist was chosen to be the next, but Chaos needed a strong body so they made Mist's body resistant to anything they could think of but when Chaos was completed it was too wild during one of Mist's use of anger and had to be sealed away, there parents were professor Leingod meaning that Zain is the oldest twin and oldest brother of Fayt.

Now information about the celestial beings fought on Elicoor II:

The two on Elicoor II are known as the Constrainer King and Queen, the King named Neo-Thanetos and the queen which is the final state of the fake Blair named Nero-Blairn. They lead the Constrainers which are the next form of evolution after Convictors and are members of the Enforcer leaders, which the leader of them all is Doomminium. Then there's the 3 kings of the Convictors and the 4 kings of the Exictioners.

oohh...interesting... sorry i couldnt do reviews for other chappies... really! i didnt know you were updating im so sorry! anyway since i reviewed now, you're happy! yay! :)

It looks like a good story so far...but there a few inconsistencies that just..throw it off...

Such as the fact that If Rei IS Mist, then that'd be a time paradox so to speak. It would mean he left the planet 5 years ago when the UP3 was in place, and/or the planet was visited by the pangalactic federation, so Leingod could perform the experiments on him. Also, it said he left for it 5 yrs ago, and that Nel knew he left to another planet...yet...the UP3 pact was in place then, not to mention the first time Nel learns of other planets is when they leave during the game.

Also, in one part Nel says She knew of Rei leaving, but later it says he just vanished without a trace...So...yea..fix the inconsistencies...

Lastly some of your grammer could use some work..such as the missed words...

Such as...

"Sophia smiled happily Albel"

You missed "At"...there are alot of those throughout most of the chapters IIRC. But ya...looks ok so far...just some constructive criticism :).

-Aways-

Seems like something happened that Maria didn't expect! Continue please!

:D

Wow, i love this chapter just like all your other ones. Hm i like the idea of MistxNel... XD Ah but Mist isn't really person, and boy have you got me confused. i want to know so badly how Mist knows Nel, you created geart suspense! Please update soon!

this was awsome, i totally loved it. i can't wait for the next chapter to come out. i hope you update soon.

later

Wow, it looks like Mist is remembering something! Please continue ASAP!

Wow, i wonder what the connection between Nel and Mist is -o-

I must know why Nel is acting so strange... Continue!

excellent, very good, {applaudes loudley} it is simply stunning, i cant wait to read the rest.

p.s. i would like to ask, if you wouldent mind, you to read and review my megaman fanfic

keep up the good work

YAY! updates! that's all and PLIZ UPDATE SOON!... MWUHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!

CONTINUE! CONTINUE! CONTINUE! CONTINUE! CONTINUE! CONTINUE! CONTINUE! CONTINUE! CONTINUE! CONTINUE! CONTINUE! CONTINUE! CONTINUE! CONTINUE! CONTINUE! CONTINUE!

Okay?

Ahh, that was a very nice reading so far. I like the whole "Mist" thing. Oh, you accidently named Elicoor II, Vanguard I in one of the paragraphs before End Chapter.

I like the stroyline and i think its cool. but it just seems a bit rushed at times. maybe you can make it take longer at some scenes and have more actions.

um not to be rude or anything but its not Vanguard I its suppose to be Ellicor II

Can't wait till next chapter!