Cool!w I'm a big Manga fan too! w

you continuing this one cause it's really good!

There's a problem with being able to read this.

You DO have paragraphs, but they need to be double spaced. Otherwise you get lost.

I also noticed a few little grammar mistakes and also some spelling trouble. But that's easily fixed.

I love seeing fics that have a good base around Thrash and Mookie, so I was more than happy to take a look at it. I think that if you defined the paragraphs more clearly, it would be an enjoyable read. :)

Good luck!

-Alori