This is amazing! Well written, good pacing, fantastic voices on all the characters. I can't wait for the next chapter.

:[ why is this the last chapter!?

You've tempted me to fanfiction your fanfiction! Fanfiction-ception. Do you think the world really needs that? Especially since the last time I did a fanfic it was 600-ish pages!? And that was all about the endar spire, Taris, and then leaving Taris, that's it, that's all! And you write something I like this much and stop after four chapters...? :(

I hope one day you return to this mysterious fanfictioner of 2004 ...

Also your writing has gotten better with each chapter, which was really interesting. The way your Ilithia character began to feel really defined was nice too. She got more clear with each passing paragraph. Good work! I've not been keen on your portrayal (almost typed 'betrayal' o.O) of Bastila. She feels a little under formed as a character.

Also you started to get some real nice banter going. Banter is my favourite form of writing I think. I'm a Gilmore Girls junkie, sooo...

Again, Carth and Il felt very youthful. Which I actually warmed to, because that's, like, the 'magic of love' or some such.

But - tattooine meant HK! How - how - how could you not...? Bah. On that note, I like how you've pretty much ignored T3's existence. That's not sarcasm. I genuinely approve.

You do good work.

Until the next chapter ...

I am really super hooked on this series. I love it. Somehow you've written the charactes in a way I hadn't thought about them before. They're almost ... More human than I had viewed them previously. You've given me very interesting things to think about here :)

However ... Personal preference...? DX don't like crying Carth. Please don't let there be more of that ...

But I love this series so much.

I don't care if you wrote it in 2004 and it's silly to review a ten year old fanfic. I like this too much to be silent.

I love this. So much. Am loving this so much.

But "yea" is old English, pronounced "yay." And yeah is "yeah" which Is what I think you mean by "yea." That bothers me.

But this is so good! I admit I scroll past anything which isn't a Carth/illi exchange. Because you do that exchange so well!

And by golly, the feeling of impending doom set about by carth visions? Love it. I have read about the theories where Carth is force sensitive himself, and until this fanfic I had despised the idea, thinking it tarnished the character somehow. But I was A FOOL. It adds validity to his paranoia, because he knows something's up through some mysterious, illogical and irrefutable means, but isn't really ... In any kind of position to stop it. Which makes his character make so much more sense.

However, on characterisation, they feel young to me, like maybe 18-25 ish age bracket. I believe that a man in his forties and a woman in her thirties would be more jaded. When I wrote them, (well, the famed FemRev anyway) I probably overdid the angst. Well ... Nah, anyway, my versions were much more damaged. And I love damaged characters. And even though you've done a good job of - oh that's right, I loved they way you did their backstory exposition - a good job of the back story angst, what happened to them didn't carry over to their interactions. It felt a little 'teen wolf Allison/Scott -ey,' which ... Well no, it felt better than that example. More heartfelt. Better written. And on the whole more likeable characters ... (I watch it for stiles...) anyway ...

I think characters of their age group would be more me reserved. Like with the wonderful gentle-hair-moving-from-face-chin-tracing things, and the spontaneous hand holding ... It makes for great reading, but it's unrepresentative of the characters personal experience. But I do indeed understand the need to facilitate the incongruency to be able to write such adorableness ...

I always get hung up on how fanfics portray mission. I feel like I didn't get it right either. So I kind of avoided her in my work, and used her to facilitate Gilmore-girl-esque banter with my FemRev. Mission would actually be freaking out, facing a major culture shock, and most likely retreat from Zaalbar ... But, pfft, details. Oh, in my fanfic I forgot the existence of Big Z for a while ' until I killed him off during the escape from Taris. Mwahaha.

I always have trouble getting that foreboding feeling ... That's so cool how you've just hit the nail on the head there.

How many Carth fan girls are there out there I wonder? We should become a sorority or something. Oh and I love all your bar scenes. I did a few of those myself, personally I find them so much fun. But try as I might I can't, cannot imagine Carth blushing. Perhaps this is due to 2003 graphics or an innate stubbornness or both, but my brain can't make the calculations to bring that notion to a visible thought projection. Or FemRev for that matter...

Isn't it funny how we seem to have all built FemRev up as this elegant, annoying Mary Sue bundle of energy? When you look at the dialogue in the game revan is actually kind of dry, detached and a little ... Harsh. But screw the originals script this is fanfiction. Carth and FemRev remind me of Anya and Dimitri. How many things have you had to google to decipher this review now? :p

By the away, My distinguished English Literature Lecturer said fanfiction is a legitimate form of fiction. This mode of expression has been sanctioned by tertiary education \/ keep at it :)

Oh and I loved the brother connection thing. Interesting.

I totally am pissed off I decided to go against Carth-as-Force-sensitive theory in my fanfic :( and I'm kind of past a rewrite. I'd have to change too much -.- can't be bothered. But man. Wish I found your story during mah research phase.

I will read more soon :)

I appreciate it's unlikely after 6 years (!) but I hope you decide to finish this story one day - it is very well written.

Awesome! Most fics that retell the basic KotOR get kinda boring, but this one's doing a good job of keeping my attention. The by-play between Revan and Carth is interesting, and I like how you introduced Dustil. Your Juhani's "voice" is rather different than the game one, but I never liked Juhani in the game-yours I do like. I hope you post a continuation soon, I can't wait!

You know, there are some kinds of fics I tend to stay away from. Among them are the ones with romance, "broken" heroes, and angst. And yet...this story has all of these, and I'm still captivated. I really think you're one of the best romance writers I've ever read, and it's amazing how tastefully you do it. I mean...it takes real talent to write a man holding a woman in bed - a woman he happens to like quite a bit! - for the sole purpose of keeping her warm during a cold night. I love the way you write true selflessness into your characters, and yet it's never preachy; it feels so natural, so right it makes me ache a little inside.

I can see that this story hasn't been updated for years, and I realize you've perhaps abandoned it, but I still wanted to tell you this, because you've given me several hours of unbelievable enjoyment. I'd be really thrilled if you decided to go on with this fic one day.

Lilan

is that the end? but ah... aw.

*You want to finish this story* hehe

Argh...I am really hoping that you eventually decide to finish your version of this story. I'm so LOVING IT!

Great story line. You write very well. The story flows and doesn't hitch anywhere to leave one wondering how they ended up at any particular point.

I wish there were more chapters that we could give feedback on and review...Any chance of that happening in the near future?

Can't critique your writing at all.

I really enjoyed reading this.

I love stories that stay somewhat true to the plot, but add in their own unique side-stories; yours is absolutely wonderful.

I noticed you don't update all too often, which is quite understandable when you have things going on outside, but you should definately stick with this. It has turned out really well and I think you got me completely hooked with the Dustil scene which was - to my dissmay - the hault to your writings.

Keep it up. Your an extremely skilled writer. :)

Poor Lashowe. Almost wished Ilithia had waited until they got the holocron and then took her out.

I certainly hope Dustil doesn't get a crush on Ilithia.

Loved Jolee's smart talk to Canderous. ;-)

Hope to read more!

You really do have the interaction between Carth and Revan down pat.

And can Bastila be anymore icy? ;-P

Love this story so far! You've definitely put a lot of thought into detail.

I'll definitely check out the other chapters as well.

Although more than a year past by since this story was updated, I have to write a review *laugh*

I really love this story. It's really well written and I love to read longer stories, cause I really have to think about them.

At some lines I really had to laugh, some others made me sad. And I love, how you wrote the whole relationship between Ilithia and Carth. And Dustil at the end... Great!