Nope, sorry. Cannot do it. I know you said you "need Beta", which wins you SOME leeway on 'issues' in writing... But after (fradgil), (aperate), and (leginemency)- I just can't keep reading.

Snarkey, I know, but why is it- in EVERY other fic AND canon, does legilmancy require the 'victim's' eyes to be OPEN, and you have Harry closing his eyes for Dumbledore to test? Your 'sandbox' and all, so whatever, but it just kind of hits me like, " I am in a hurry here. It's not THAT important. And it is MORE IMPORTANT to be fast, than it is to be RIGHT!"
It's a shame, 'cuz the story COULD be good, and if I didn't think so, I'd quit reading and not give a #$*.

I really like how you write this story

Please Update Soon.

hello. i was reading your story and i noticed your really good about spacing out all of your paragraphs to make them easier to read, except the last 2, if you could space those the way you space the rest of each chapter it would make it much easier to read. thanks,

jacob

Hi

I love the story update soon.

Thanks

A-I-T-B

update soon! Please...

Please update soon! I want to find out what happens next! Just a bit of advice: it would be a good idea to describe how things look, otherwise people get curious.

this is a great story but you donot need to go day by day

I think this is what is giving you the block

I have just found this story and it has got a lot of promise

Please update soon

More detail than most but its kinda interesting! Thanks for sharing.

Eskaybe

Hi I just found you summer Story and like reading and then i noted that you had not update in a wile.

Dumbledore won't mind the shopping? Harry's going to be a bit stronger later on? Some of the paragraphs should be a little shorter.

Working on a saturday? What animals is Harry's? Will Harry get his broom back? Sirius's name to be cleared?

very good story please update soon

i must say i love it. and i hope by fuling your need of reviews that it makes you write more.

TuxedoMac

very very very good update soon cant wait