I really like how you made Cloud human. He was awkward and caring instead of cold and proud. I felt as if I was eavesdropping on a private conversation. Calming and sincere are the two words that describes this. oh and really good are two more words to describe it also

This is easily one of the most moving fanfictions I have ever read, as well as one of the most 'convincing'. Unlike most, I could really "see" Cloud saying all of this, feeling all of this. It was natural and honest. Awesomeness.

Simply beautiful. You captured Cloud's personality the way I think he would have acted and felt. Please write more _

Whoa HB, they weren't kidding when they said you were a great writer. Here, you've managed to take a tested formula and add more poignance into it through lyrical prose and sharp metaphors. I love how it doesn't beat around the bush with melodrama...it delves into Cloud's raw and unfiltered thoughts, just like that! And yeah, he's completely in character...I never once doubted that it was Cloud 'speaking' to me, unlike in some other fics.

Good choice of the 'dissolve' theme...especially the part about her never fully blending in with anything. And I like how it all ends with him thanking her for not dissolving from *their* memories. 2 unrelated ideas linked by a great common theme, as Stephen King said in his book "On Writing"

Loved it. (obviously! _)

-Argentus aka Kusari Yarou

Wow. This was absolutely beautiful. i know that most people feel that it's hard to portray Cloud's perspective, but you've done such an amazing job. It's heartfelt and poignant, and the last line especially captures the mystery and beauty of the young flower girl.

I really like this. It's different, the way you wrote it I mean, from other stories.

Lady Thyme~

One of the few things I dislike about our shared fandom is the tendency to bash Cloud and Aeris; the former as either a heartless, soulless puppet who dances to Sephiroth's whim or turns a blind eye to Tifa's love, and the latter as a ditzy attachment. Fortunately, there are the stories that aren't afraid to look closer, and yours is one of those. Throughout "Dissolve," you presented one of the best Cloud's I've read. He was more than a hero, a blinded lover, a puppet; you made his humanity - and his *thought* processes very, very clear; a thoughtful, reflective Cloud was a refreshing change to read! As well, his lasting affection for Aeris was beautifully written.

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I loved how everything came full circle; so much to say turned to "thank you," a sense of longing turned to peace, and an eerie, blue-lit tomb could be redeemed by the fact that she could 'see starlight'. Sensitive, beautiful work; I'll definitely be recommending this.

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Cheers,

~Sabriel.

Why isn't this getting more reviews? It's a sad day when the good stories are lost between the bad ones...

"Just as I’m thankful that even though you’re lying deep beneath the blue stillness of that lake, long before your time, your sleeping face is still staring up at the sunlight."

I love this line - for some reason, it just sent shivers down my spine. Good shivers, of course. Cloud at his best here, I'd say. You got him down perfectly. And I love how you kept this mysterious and emotional, without being sappy. A thoughtful and spiritual Cloud? I sort of like that image. :)

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aw... so sad. but very good. i liked it.

Wow... that was just, GREAT! I really loved it! You did a great job with Cloud's emotions and it was just beautiful. Very, very good. You should write more Cloud and Aerith stories, hehe... I could never get sick of those! Keep writing!