Wondering when something like this would happen

Here is an idea

Invent some girls for him to marry

stopped reading at the first para in chapter 8. If you want to make Hermione stupid and unreasonable, and especially if you want her to betray Harry, you need to make the story AU before at least 4th year. Otherwise it doesn't make any sense.

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Blaise Is a guy

harry a sans doute appris a controler ses émotions chez les dursleys; non?
que deviennent james lily ron et hermione?
s'entrainnent ils avec les autres?

The light side are dumber than the Keystone Cops! Can anyone spel ! Mad Eye's memory could point out WHO shot that dart into Harry, thereby starting the race to find the Trio. Goot Gott in Himmel !

Fuck this story, I was already forcing myself to read the next chapter after the fuckups in chapter 6. But this chapter just was too much from the article alone.

I was already utterly baffled why albus would be such a useless twat about removing fudge, when he has evidence the guy conspires with a DE, was wrong about LV's return AND was still doing nothing to fight LV. But twinkles dumbledore just sits in his castle, not giving interviews, not using his reputation or power to remove fudge as minister, with his wrinkly old thumb up his ASS, while fudge lets the DE's out of jail...

The heroes in your fic are so far, even MORE useless than in canon. At least in canon they managed to get fudge removed from office. I'm done with this waste of words fic.

I'm going to have to force myself to even try the next chapter thanks to 2 big problems in this chapter.

First was the disturbing and utterly ridiculous snape/mcgonagall pairing and them being blaise's secret parents. Minerva was a teacher and probably head of house when snape was a student! Talk about gross! But this would answer why minerva was so utterly fucking useless at protecting harry and her lions from snape's abuse and bias. That just makes me dislike her more in your fic than I already did from canon.

Then there is the utterly crap ending where somehow it takes snape seemingly 20 minutes to create a portkey. Something that we see Albus do in ootp in about 10 seconds, takes snape over 10 minutes? Bullshit.

Interesting story. Had some decent funny parts. Also had some elements that came right outta left field. Specifically J and L randomly returning because of some asinine plan.

any who... moving on now.

where it says battlerobe i read it wrong and thought it said bath robe i sat there for like a minute thinking why the fuck would he need a basilisk skin bath robe lmaooo love your story though

punch not pounch and combat not combate just two of the typos that stuck out as i was reading i would have pmed them to you so you could fix them quietly but your profile has no such option

blaise is a boy in cannon also just to let you know

beyond that DAMN GOOD STORY!

Hi! Say, havent you written "Birth of the phoenix"? If so, could you perhaps send me the files you still have? Thanx!

mail is fanfictionnet at maikkoenig dot de

[quote]So what I am planning is a complete restructuring of the Order with all of you as its leadership class.[/quote]

Leadership class?

You should know that there can't be several leaders for the same army. Without a proper chain of command there will be chaos because people won't know who's order to follow when there are 2 opposite commands.

To think that there won't be contradictory orders is a naive dream.

Also leaders can be only those with enough experience.

If you think someone like Molly (an example) or Luna (other example) have enough experience fighting to be leaders then naive is an understatement.

First chapter is quite disappointing, but I'll continue reading, maybe it'll get better.

Good chapter.

Good chapter.