He had him and you have let him off why, very confusing.

Harry is playing a very dangerous game, he’s not up to a duel with V so it’s all just a dream for him. He should go and fight V but maybe escape with Hermione Coming and rescure him before he hurts himself.

Aaaaaaaaa poor Harry why give him blades if he’s going to act like a dickhead.

Tell you what i got out of this chapter, a still not trained Harry.

This chapter made the least sense of any you have written. Harry has Riddle right where he wants him and just lets him go to fight another day? Why would he do that? Why would Remus and Albus just stand there and let Tom fire an AK at them? Even dumb, weak Peter reacted to his curse faster than they did.
Another thought, the dialogue for Riddle is weak and sparse. Since he is the main antagonist we should be seeing more of his mental and magical ability. He is coming across like a comic villain.
BTW, kudos for the redemption of Peter. Not many writers have done that. He is easy to hate.

The purpose of seconds in a duel is commonly misunderstood. They are twofold: first, the seconds are the ones to make the arrangements for the duel (time, place, distance, count, and weapons) the reason being that cooler heads are more likely not to make too many errors in these important decisions. Secondly, the second is to step in for his prime only if their opponent has cheated in one of the agreed points. For example, Malfoy rushes the count and fires on "2" instead of "3" and wounds Potter, making him unable to continue the duel. Potter's second would then step in and continue the duel. If both opponents obey the agreement and one is too injured to continue, that is called a victory, and the winner does not have to duel the man's second to secure his win.

I enjoyed this chppter.

Oops! The reason for a dragonhide vest is because it's extremely resistant to magic. So how can it be charmed to be weightless?

Work on voice. All of your character sound too similar.

Heey mister author,

Just to remind you, Blaise is a BOY !

Honestly, have you never seen the half blood prince ?

On the hogwarts express draconisch tells Blaise to shut up, i quote

'shut it zabini' sake draco. For further notice, Blaise is the black coloured boy sitting next to where draco is standing.

If you really meant to make Blaise a girl, you should've posted an autors note.

But for the rest of it, i really like you're story!

Greets,

Jenny

I really liked your story. I just hope that Harry and Ginny have a future to gather and that you don't kill Reamus Lupin. I hope you keep coming up with good story lines because I really enjoy them and you are so good at keeping the attention on the story and chartors. Keep up the good luck. GOd bless you and yours.

YOu said Trent was dead! That is just evil. DId Siruis know he lived? And when does Lupin Tell harry about not being a wearwolf anymore. And what happens to the rat?

what is this, a merger of HP and dragon ball or something? lol

Awesome Fic!

The plot is good, straight forward but not predictable. You lack a bit 'feel' once in a while. I don't seem to get caught up in the story as much as I want to. Much just happens, there is no emotional response from me (the reader)

That said, I still think you balance the darker part with the light part perfectly. You focus on Harry's transition to a powerful wizard, who can oppose the power of Voldie.

Don't see my comment as flaming. See it as an observation, narrow display of emotions is ok, but you do extreme emotions, I just think there could be more balance if you'd show more diversity.

I really enjoyed reading this story. THANK YOU

this story was really good, i think that it could have been improved with more detail but apart from that it is a brilliant read. you deserve a lot more reviews than you have