i really love your story :)

Hi,

My friend, MIsstrollqueen, asked me to read this so she could have a second opinion so here goes.

GENERAL: I really don't think you should have changed Ginny's name, okay so its your fanfic, but that shouldn't give you the right to change someone elses character.

PLOT: Not really seeing one at the moment, but then its only a first chapter. :)

CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT: okay, Ginny isn't looking into that much during the books so you were sort of free to describe her how you wanted but, I'm sorry, this is slightly over the top.

Ginny is quite unpleasant at that best of times; e.g, the whole fiasco with lavender. Harry is quiet pleasant thought their conversation and, seemingly to harry, so is Ginny but as she walks away she calls him a jerk. she goes from being shy, to angry almost instantaneously, i'm sorry but that's poor writing.

STRUCTURE: your paragraphing is good as is your sentence structure but your grammar is rather lacking, I can tell that you didn't look over your chapter before you posted it, you really need to do this.

Over all an okay chapter, I haven't read any of the other chapters but I intend to.

beth

I must say this story has been a great source of amusement for me this evening, it's Christmas eve and this is fun D

Mind you... I stopped reading the actual story a while back and just read the authors notes, after a while I started reading the reviews, the A/N's are my favourite part of the story...that isn't a good thing.

Asked a friend to read this 2 btw, to make sure i wasn't going crazy and just being an ass hole (bethybonbons)

So ok i'm gunna give you a proper review:

PLOT: it's an ok plot, i like the idea i suppose, I just think it could be better

CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT: Yeah, so I get it, the whole people telling you she ain't like Ginny and shit, its bullshit, this is fanfiction, the whole point is you make it your own, but I have to say I have seen many different interpretations of Ginny and yours is my least favourite. Ginny is Ginny, you don't get much insight into the character in the books so you can prittey much make her as you wish but it would kinda be good if how you wish was actually interesting. Have some imagination please. So honestly your Ginny is rather boring, and i'm calling her your Ginny cuz she's yours, you made her into what she is now in the fic and by your A/N i can see you know that, but be aware that just cuz she's yours, doesn't mean that she's brilliant... She needs to be interesting, people need to be able to relate to her, this may be fanfiction but its always good to keep at least some of the original character, which brings me to my next point. You changed her name.

This IS fanfiction, but that does NOT give you the right to change the characters name, she can have a nickname, whatever, but don't change it. At this point i would like to point out that I obviously think you are stupid because I'm gunna remind you that her name is GENEVRA and you would do well to keep it that way. Is that not what you think everyone who doesn't like your story thinks, they think you're stupid? Mate, people have opinions, live with it. My opinion is that I don't think you should have changed her name, its hers, not yours, she may be your ginny as in thats how her character is, not her name, if you wanted her to be as she is you should have done a O/C fic.

All this and now i'm onto Draco. I agree that you should be able to make Draco a good guy, as in he's on the good side, but how boring is it that he is now perfect, the lovely boyfriend, all Genevra's relatives suddenly don't mind him, he suddenly decided to be nice, suddenly he has no character. Suddenly he's just a boy. Draco is a complex character and he needs to be written as such.

So the rest of the characters are prittey ok, I think everyone goes a bit over the top with Ron so i'm not gunna say anything else about that, Hermione and Harry don't really have much of a character in this, thats fine if you're not planning on including them that much, wich is weird cuz this is a Harry Potter fic but i like it better without Harry, he annoys me.

GENERAL: the writing ok, needs improvement but hey this is fanfiction, in my opinion thats what its for, improving writing skills and entertainment.

STRUCTURE: your paragraphing is good as is your sentence structure but your grammar is rather lacking, I can tell that you didn't look over your chapter before you posted it, you really need to do this. (I copied this of my friend mate, she is right)

I'M HAVING A WHOLE NEW CATEGORY FOR A/N: You are rude, which is a big thing coming from me, I don't think a day goes by without someone commenting on how rude I am, but you, you are just blatantly rude. People. Have. Opinions. Let them. Most of the people you were having a go at were right mate. If you can't take people criticizing don't bother posting the story.

Honestly, I'm glad I don't know you, cuz I'd fucking hate you.

Josi

THIS is the only way that it will ever be acceptable to change the characters, and this if to make fun of them: watch?vwmwM_AKeMCk

'A/N Ok guys I realize that I just all of a sudden added a war, I meant to have metnioned it earlier but I got caught up in Ginny and Draco and forgot'... yeah, good move, clever mate, clever

right at the very beginning ginny asked draco what his fav book was twice the second needs to be "whats your favorite food?" since thats the question he answers next. if im mistaken please disregard.

so i absolutely love your story so far. it upsets me a lil that some ppl are illiterate and cant read A/Ns and others dont understand the concept of Fan Fics... but anyways in this chapter when ron and the twins are leaving draco's room you said that ron and fred were shoving ron out of the room and it needs to be fred and george... thought you might want to kno.

I finished this story. It was quite sad. Good job. :)

ahahaha- "You're beautiful too."

(Ginny to Draco)

That's freaking hilarious.

I have to tell you. I don't know when you will return to this name, but after each chapter I am equally as excited to read the 'disclaimer' as I am to read the story.

You are freaking hilarious, the end.

Again cool story :)

Okay, I just read the beginning of this chapter and I have to say one thing.

No!

The Golden Compass is the American title, the original is The Northern Lights. You probably already know that, I just love the original title better. But that's all. I'm good now. You can use whatever you want 'cause it's your story _.

I'm gonna go finish the chapter now.

Every time I begin a chapter I read the little comments you leave to stupid reviewers who think they're smart. I always think "I'm going to congratulate her when I finish this chapter", but by the time I get to the end I forget ... short term memory... But anyway, I agree with everything you say to stupid not-so-smart smart arses. Honestly, why do they bother reading fanfiction?

Ginny's looks: You've described her as beautiful from Draco's point of view. You also describe her as having grown up. Of course that's true! Duh, you'd hope she'd hit puberty as she's 16. That "BabyPan" chick is delusional. Although I actually think Ginny is HOT anyway, 'cause she is.

Bahahahaha, and the sentence she wrote while trying to prove how grammatically correct she is was completely stupid!

I must admit that you make a few grammatical mistakes and things - I wouldn't mind being your beta if you haven't got one? But they definitely aren't as bad as that crap she wrote!

Yes, there are a few stories with this kind of story line, but that happens. Every Ginny/Draco author has to write one. It's usually the first storyline everyone thinks of - I did, too, actually. I haven't written one though. I am writing a story, but it isn't Ginny/Draco, it's just focused on Ginny and eventually and OC. I'm not going to post it until I have quite a few chapters, though.

Anyway, I think this is a long review...so I'll stop. But I do really like this story _. I finished another one of yours yesterday, too - 'A Lonely September'. Loved it _.

Great story. Nice job.

OMG i read A Lonely September and i reviewed for that one too but enough about that book i want to talk about this one... IT WAS AMAZING! i loved it alot you are one AMAZING fanfiction writer i am sorta jealous for your talent so again kudos to you for making an amazing story

aww that was so good. poor harry. thats SO SAD. why do the good die young? well that was wonderful i loved it.