Totally sweet! I love it! The best one shot LokiFenris story out here! You should write some more!

I like this. The characterization is barely even OOC, and it's just freaking awesome how you showed Loki falling for Fenris. Definitely not a corny piece of literary work. And your metaphorical phrases are just.. beautiful. Keep writing! :)

It was beautiful and made my heart ache for the both of them. Fenris will never heal completely - no one ever really does, but given time, Loki might be the balm she needs for her wounds.

Thank you for that brilliant piece of writing.

Very sweet. I liked your characterization of Loki and Fenris very much, including the dynamic among all the members of the party. There were some rough spots (like Loki referring to Fenris by name, which I don't see happening anytime soon) but otherwise it was a very enjoyable fanfiction, thank you!

Aww...the dance was so sweet... I love this fic! Keep writing!

That was totally refreshing! The way that you had somehow effectively made the plot to a degree that it was as if fate had a very big role to play... it was all magnificent to an extent that it was beautiful. Yes, they were very much in character! Yes, it's true. I could say that this was very interesting to read, a very good one. Lengthy! You could definitely say that this one was a very good. The grammar was very good, typos were very minimal, the sentence patterns were well, and the dialogue among the members are constant and are described fully well. You've definitely thought out your story, miss. Kudos to the three who inspire you, too!

~Chonki

Omg. This story is lurved!

Wow, really good, and imensely enjoyable. :) I loved the whole tradition of exchange, and even I couldn't stop the silly grin from appearing when Fenris just happened to get her own pin back. Good job! Favorite

Yaay! Soo sweet! LOVED IT!

Yes! Too cool, too cool, too cool! I love it!

Well, the idea is interesting. You have some spelling and grammer errors that detracted from the whole thing, and the Iris/Chaos dialogue at the beginning and end didn't work ver well, but this is an interesting fic. Plain dialogue isn't very interesting, and in fact, it's kind of off-putting to a critical eye. The whole idea is kind of cute, but the epilogue was unneeded and took away from the cuteness of the orinal ending. And anything that refers to eyes as "orbs" needs to rethink the image. As many good fic authors know, that particular image is a recipe for your own thread of GAFF. While this is nowhere near the quality they get on there, I would rethink some of the unneeded flowery language. A lot of authors use it to make their works look smarter, but oftentimes it doesn't work. And you yourself are a little guilty of that.

Anyways, this is only some concrit, so I hope you don't take this the wrong way. It's only to help, and I wouldn't have bothered if I didn't think you would take it seriously. Best of luck for future writing.

Immortal

wow that was enchanting simply beautifull!

I love this fic. Simply love it!

"and because you like it so much, you can't say anything else, ne?"

...uhh, yeah. That's correct.

"fine. she likes this coz' the grammar is superb, and this is simply one of the best ragnarok fanfics out there. and because she likes fenris/loki."

Thanks.

- teh jj and Paul("")-

CoOl

Nice story, Keep it up!