awl. too bad there's not more, you're such a good writer, and that was very interesting.

You know if this had happened on the show, or if Miroku really thought like that, then I would have kept watching the show. Hell, I would probably be praising despite it's sloppy drawing style. What I love about this, so deeply much, is that it is what Naraku should be doing. Why spend time fighting the insipid group when he could slowly break them, while taking his own pleasure from it? That is a true evil villian. One that does the job and takes pleasure from it.

Besides that, there are two wonderful things about this story (actually three, but I'll get to that one much later). First, is how positively delightful it is reading the conversation between Naraku and Miroku. By switching POV's (which normally I'm against, but, my God, it works, it works) quickly, we get to see how each of the characters is viewing each other's actions, what they're trying to bluff. We know Miroku isn't going to get out of this unscathed, hell even he knows it too, but watching him try too anyway, vainly, even when rescue doesn't show up until far too late. Hell, if you had stopped there, I would have been happy with what I've read. Since you didn't...I have to go into the second part that I adore about this story. Reality check. Miroku has been raped, deflowered violently, etc. He's hurt and in pain and so of course he's not going to be alright. In fact if there was a complete opposite of rightness, he'd be smack right in it. And you write perfectly. He tries to say he is (like many victims, tragically) even though everyone, I expect even Inuyasha can see there's a not rightness, can see he isn't. This could have easily turned into a hurt/comfort story, major hurt, but an h/c nonetheless. Only there is no release for Miroku, there probably isn't going to be for some time nor should it, if you plan on suspending that audience's beliefs long enough (and I have to raise this question, wouldn't Naraku be more interested in, say, Kagome or Inuyasha than Miroku since those are the ones that are really hindering him, on the other hand, it is exactly about the hand isn't it? Oh dear, that was bad, m'bad) for comfort to finally appear (which there is right? Although I'm not asking for it. Hell as long as Miroku stays as snarky, though that's not exactly the word I'm looking for, perhaps captivating and almost cynical about the world, (experienced perhaps), I don't really care what happens next.

Er...I mean to say keep writing, really. Yes, hmm, well, anyways, I also want to sincerely thank you for not turning this into a cliche , not only is that offensive in thinking (as if rape leads to a quick jump into bad like that), it's annoying because I see it almost all the time. A few weeks later, and bang, two characters, usually male (not that I am complaining about slash, that is not what I am complaining about, nosirree, no complaint about m/m slash over here, ) are getting hot and heavy. Meh, lost total suspended belief.

Nice careful dealing with the actual rape. Let the audience imagine what exactly happen, how it led up, how Miroku got rescued. Now I'm really curious to see everyone elses reaction to what happened to Miroku. Very good authorship (I am pretending that is a word, live with it) if you can keep it up. Wish you good luck with writer's block.

please update

I'm sorry to hear that this is on hiatus. Truly, it is an amazing piece of writing. The way you capture moods and personalities... just... wow. I hope you do come back to it.

i live in walla walla.

Ooh, wasn't expecting a Kirara perspective. Not many people take up that POV; Too difficult for most, it seems. Myself included. *cough*

You pulled it off flawlessly, though. *applauds* You're completely right when you say that animals/pets, even if they don't seem the most observent, can sometimes offer the best support; heaven knows my little doxie has seen enough of my complaints and tears. ;

*buys the metal shield and sells it on the black market for triple the value*

Head explosion? Wait, what'd -I- do? XD; *protects both herself and her little dog with a cardboard shield*

Anyway, this continues to be a very well written, well thought out fic. Despite the fact that you claim you have 'no bloody idea' what you're doing, it continues to turn out magnificent. Don't worry, this happens to all really good authors; it just means the characters ran ahead of you. When you catch up, you'll be stunned and awed, but realize what you've been writing and how it all connects. It just means you're an excellent commander of the English launguage. :3

I continue to eagerly await for more. *edges away with her cardboard shield*

i loved this chapter even better. dang, Naraku made me laugh. i think i might very well be morbid! continue on. and yea, i prefer it in a one persone point of view. especially if it is Naraku. lol! why must i always love the villains! lol

Wow. Simply, wow. You have an amazing skill at this, let me tell you; Naraku's narrative was flawless. There's not much else to say past 'perfection' in regards to this interlude.

And, yes, it did make a great deal of things more obvious. XD

This continues to be an excellent, excellent fic. Looking forward to more. :3

Where are all the reviews? *pokes the readers* Review, people! This is an amazingly good story! Why not review? /plug

Anyway, the fic continues to go very, very well. :D The hysteria on Kagome's part did not seem forced at all, like some fanfics tend to have it; here, it's completely natural, and it's completely understandable. You were right; Kagome IS a girl from our time, and is prone to our behavioral patterns.

..And, what's this? 'His hand'? Did Naraku chop off Miroku's hand while he was at it? o_O

*applauds and eaerly awaits more ficcyness*

Ja~

Walla, walla, walla! XD

Where have I heard that before darling? *giggle*

As my Inu Yasha knowledge is limited, I won't give you a painfully long review...as I am prone to do. *

This story is morbid... I mean... talking about death, torture, rape...

And yet I cannot help but love it. x.x

I really adore the way you write, too. _ It's somewhat rare to find a story with so many (pardon my odd wording; I'm running entirely on caffeine) big words that still goes smoothly.

This is a wonderful story. _ Keep up the good work, and I hope that you do write another chapter!

~~Keera

Oh, a new chapter. A very spiffy chapter, at that. It's rather rare to find such a fic like this that isn't utterly about the act itself and more on the emotional and psychological attatchment, and to find it here is a very pleasent surprise. :3

I'd love to see more on this. I think your use of POV and even the switching of it was used rather well. *applauds the spiffyness!*

Your character descriptions, both in thought and speech, are simply brilliant. I think you captured the near-hysteria Miroku is feeling very well, and Naraku was embodied perfectly.

I'd love to read more of this. It's simply spiffy. :3 *applauds!*

Hrm... ::shifty eyes:: Interesting...

Sort of a strange plot, but... you write it beautifully. _

Keep up the good work!

~~Keera