I enjoyed reading your story. You should get rights from them to make them a book. I like that you tie everything in and make it a priority.

On a one to 10...I give a 9.

I love your story. It's interesting to read about this violet girl and her being away from her home.

The characters are well presented and interpreted well (Some stories I've read they weren't) and actually surprising me that there wasn't a Goa'uld in the Sarcophagus. Now I'm interested in the Alien and wonder how its going to get home.

This Kiera girl doesnt seem so surprised and as you expressed in your story her eyes are mesmerising. So she's on my suspisions list. :)

So I hope you keep going with this story because its quite good 'fic.

Looking forward to updates!

~Loz

Great beginning, keep writing! You’ve got an interesting plot idea going on here, I’d really like to see where this leads.