this was really cute :)

Hi, I've just read this fic, and I have to say that I really love this! I know it's been years since this story is finished, and IDK if you're still into this fandom, but will you write a sequel? If not l, may I write something like this? I'll give disclaimers and such, so I just want your permission.. please pm me?

I have to say I love this story. The way you portray Tsuzuki was amazing. I really hope you continue this story. The characterization and the way you wrote it were amazing!

*silence*

Cold: I'm one of her muses...this was...damn, good! She loves it. I love it and we both wanna see if there's going to be a sequel. And hun, couldn't tell that English wasn't your native language. Nicely done!

I don't know why I didn't review this fic sooner - I favourited it here around the time you wrote it, but somehow never got round to reviewing.

The touching moments between Tsuzuki and Hisoka in this fic are so sweet and emotional that they made me cry. The way you portrayed Hisoka here, emphasising his childlike side, was both moving and convincing. I also liked your take on Tsuzuki - a well-rounded portrayal of him, capturing the many sides of his personality.

All in all, a beautiful fic.

I found you again!-after what, 5 years? I suddenly had an urge for a TsuHiso fic that was well written and over 10000 words, and I saw your penname and though: I know(read) this person! and completely fell in love again, with the fandom, with the story, and with you.

As I was reading it, I was thinking-Though Tsuzuki promised to never hurt Hisoka and keep him safe, and we all know Tsuzuki makes promises he has every intention of keeping but rarely ever does, how would he react to the Devil's Trill arc? With Hisoka in this world being defenseless, I want to see how you would portray the empath once he is able to somewhat use his Shinigami powers and also Tsuzuki fighting with his demons. Though it makes me sad that ultimately Hijiri is the one that saves Tsuzuki's soul, I would be absolutely delighted to read your take on it.

Much love, and may you continue to share your dreams and talents with this community.

Aww... so sweet. I'm adoring Hisoka's vulnerability in this story. You've greatly managed to keep him in character, but changed him to fit your AU based on the circumstances. I have the feeling that if the real manga had gone this way Hisoka would feel very much the same as you're portraying him now, further enhanced by the fact that he'd forgotten what had initially happened to him in the original.

I don't have anything at all to critique about the plot and the overall characterizations. I've noticed about one or two very minor spelling and grammer errors, those being "defenceless" as opposed to "defenseless" in this chapter. Also, Maria had song "On second thoughts, ..." The correct way would be "On second thought, ..."

Same chapter: Hisoka thought, "He knew better than to try to oppose resistance" "Oppose resistance" literally means to "go against resistance" Which means that Hisoka thought that he knew better than to go against resistance". So yeah... in other words, he felt that he SHOULD be resisting.

I think you meant that he knew better than to resist. Was that confusing? Sorry.

Hehe, there's probably more, but I'm leaving it at that. You did a wonderful job. Kudos ~ ! I shall love you and your story forever! BTW, this fic is going to give me diabetes with its sugary sweetness.

But yeah, relatedly, Hisoka's the type of character I feel just this intense motherly attraction to. (Two other examples being Eigetsu from Saiunkoku and Ayase from Okane Ga Nai) Which is why I just adore seeing him so cuddleable!

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Yay! It's so beautiful!

Okay, since I was a horrible person and didn't slow down my reading in order to leave reviews every chapter, I'll leave an extraordinarily long one for you now!

Okay, first: I know you said AU, but the description made me think this was going to be a continuation AU, where it initially follows the storyline and then says 'screw it' and goes off on a tangent, so I was confused for the first couple of chapters until it became more apparent.

Second: When you're discussing what actually happened in the manga, either be more dynamic or skip right over it, because your story tends to drag at these parts. Sometimes you DO show it, and it's really interesting, just because you enter thoughts into the mix, which we usually didn't get in the manga. So I'd prefer that. But if you don't want to show it, the pretty lines-that-denote-time-breaks work perfectly well.

Third: Poor 'Soka! You must really like him as a character, because he just can't catch a break. _ Or maybe that's just me; whenever I like a character, the character suffers. It makes me feel like a sadist sometimes. But for this AU, I think you did a really good job creating Hisoka. His OOC-ness definitely fits. Three full years of that nasty bastard touching him... yeah, I can see how there's be some serious developmental backlogging going on there.

I'd also like to say that Tsuzuki suffered well, too, and he did fit both the storyline and the early-days view within the first manga. So well done!

Your writing ability's pretty good, too, and the only problems were the rare typo, the lack of commas when they were sometimes needed, and a rare tendency for run-ons, often caused by the second problem. All in all, I was thrilled to find something so well-written and obviously taken care of. You may say it's all the beta, but the sentence structures state that you had a hand in it, too. Congrats!

And lastly, I have of course favorited this story, and I want to thank you for writing it. Brilliantly done. _

-Kayura

oh wow this story was abselutely amazimg!

*whispers* will you write a sequel?

please? it was just so god! god i wanna continue reding i didnt want it to end!... but it did *sob*

please make a sequel! XD

This is so awesome, sad and intriguing! I liked how you managed to fit yor plotline into parts of the original plotline, which made it seem all the more real...like an alternate reality or something. From what Enma said to Tsuzuki (when telling him about his new partner) was the 'bad incident' involving his young mind to do with the Kurosaki arc in the books which invoved that snake demon? and Enma's words of Hisoka being his plan what kept Tsuzuki loyally bound to him became void once Hisoka's connection to Muraki was revealed?...I mean I got the impression that Enma wanted the boy within his division due to his empathy & his plan to keep Tsuzuki. Not dispose of him or keep him under lock & key after just one case...I take it Soka was deemd to much effort to simply be kept to continually spy on.

I also take it, given that last chapter that Hisoka does get better (i.e. heals a little over time)? Least that is what it suggested. A sequel to maybe continue a little into the rest of the plot, would be nice but no worries if not. Its really sad/bittersweet and amusing to see what a couple of changes could do overall to this, this one certainly has a more darker feel to it but not in a way that cannot be corrected i.e. not one that just throws you into despair over it again & again. But with the ending as it is its almost like saying that evrything will work out fine (perhaps in a similar to the origianal vers.)

I have to say I quite like Tsuzuki in this, Hisoka's a little too soft but from certain points in this he's not completely w/o a backbone-if he were I'm not sure I could have read & still enjoyed this quite as much.

The lyrics all fitted perfect and I bet all those Muraki innuendos by Hisoka -bold,different font and italic! wonderful effect but a pain to do I imagine_

Lovely story.

I love this fic! I loved Hisoka! It made me so happy. You are ver good so I beg you to write a sequel if you can find time and all. You rock

;3 Puu

Ohmigosh it was REALLY good! I've read really good ones lately, but this is the first one that made me silently scream so loud. (oxymoron, yeah I know...)

I liked your AU, it was interesting, and I liked how you closed some of the small imperceptible mysteries. Also, I kinda liked Enma as the badguy, it kinda fit.

Love Tsuoka, can't get enough of it, there's a fangirl for ya. Anyways, loved your story. Keep writing, 'cuz I'll be looking for your junk. (Lol, sory, I call everything junk...)

Kiko

I have never seen the magnas, so I learned alot from reading this fic! (I gotta find me the magnas)

I really enjoyed 'Gifts' and I am so hoping for more!

Absolutely lovely story! Thank you for the pleasure I got from reading it.