that was BRILLIANT!

i know this review is about five years late but i just wanted to say how amazing this story. it's the only fruits basket fanfic that has hit me so powerfully. i'm not usually a fan of akito/hatori but the way he tries so hard to get hatori's attention through being sick is so believable i could see it happening.

This is crazy. Absolutely crazy. Poor Hatori. I feel bad that he has to deal with this. It would drive me insane if I had to deal with Akito. I would eventually snap at him and be like 'leave me the f* alone!' type of thing. v-v *hugs hatori* I can't help but sypathize for akito though. He goes through all this and it helps me understand why he's so anal all the time. ... I hate it when they make you like the bad guy. lol.

Things I liked:

Nice beginning - I like the description/detail about Akito

I like how you introduced Hatori into this

I love the idea of Hatori in a winter wonderland - wow he was harsh XD

Wow, Akito really is controlling but then that's the point of each of your fics

Great interaction between Hatori and Akito

The information is so deep that I love reading it

He's evil and broken enough to lie down naked?

I know it's sort of phallic but I liked the description of the genitals and the difference between male and female

Excellent diction

Characterization is very near perfect

Lol, I like Hatori's comment over Shigure's novel

Akito really is a sick little baby

Good transitioning through time

I liked the idea of how their births are never recorded, it's pretty cool to think about

The part with Kyo is really interesting

I really like Megumi's character

Nice Akito-Kyo interaction

I love the end as well

Ways to improve:

You might want to consider condensing some of the sentences - it rambles slightly

Some dropped words

You didn't need to start a new line on poison or on somebody's life

Grammar problems

I think guest room is two words not one

Fantastic work

~Myst

Warning: The next part is brutally honest

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Things I didn't like:

Not too fond of the tense this is written in - although I do admire your talent to write this way

I dislike bracketed words

Would she really say see you later to the head of the family?

Wow! That was great. It was just how I thought Akito's mind would be like, abusing people and getting sick because he was afraid people would stop loving him.

You should do other stories like that, just...Hatori and Yuki!

I don't often review, but I just had to for this one. It's really amazing- you've made Akito very human, something I felt the manga and anime didn't do. And as far as I would like a happy ending, Hatori and Akito not falling right into each other's arms just made it more real for me.

Wow. This is so good! Well done!

Oh..my..God. Aweswome fic. Akito was done so well

This is such a good story

I really like it.

And its windy outside. (gasp)

i loved this. tell me do you think it's disterbing in any way that i am like a cross between Yuki, Ritsu and Akito when it comes to my attitude ? I LOVE AKITO. sorry for rambleing

Woot That was an awsome story I had never read one like that and it makes me wonder what Akito feels like. I also liked how you for the most part managed to be as colse to the charecters as they were meant to be. I really liked it and as I promised I reviewed. Oh and to answer your question in my story it was meant to be nague because 1 I was tired and 2 becuase I mentioned the wound on his eye had healed but not the wounds inside so it was like a what if kind of story. But anyways fantastic ob! I look forward to talking to you again.

-Sem

This was... a bit disturbing...

But I like disturbing stuff! VERY VERY GOOD.

It was a psychological analysist that got Akito RIGHT THERE...

I'm sort of scared how well you know Akito. 0_0

And I WANTWANTWANT to point something out to you, but... that would spoil the manga for you. Can I just say that...

... Er... You've got Akito's mother, Ren, COMPLETELY WRONG? -squeaks-

Gomen, gomen... Heh heh. But seriously... this was good.

AND ONE OF THE LONGEST ONEFICS LIKE EVER.

But I hate how Hari would just IGNORE poor Aki-sama...

MAKE MORE FICS ABOUT LOVELY AKI!

I kept thinking about reviewing this fic when I first read it (about 20 mins ago :D)but I was tongue-tied! It's so amazingly accomplished, it's obvious that a lot of effort and time went into writing it! I really think that you are the best Akito/Hatori fic writer out there. There is clarity and understanding in every paragraph: the invalid Akito's dependence on the only person that ever acknowledges him (even if just to give meds) and cool Hatori..efficient, methodical, emotionless...perfect! Oh, and I love how Akito is psychotic. And how he suffers. I think FB fans don't see that enough..they don't see the whimpering child, just the violent dictator. Oh yes and thank you for reviewing - I'm a first-timer Akito/Hatori writer and I hope my fic turns out to be as good as yours are. Thank you again for your encouragement.

Whoa...THAT'S a different side of Akito. This was really kinda freaky, but so skillfully written. I'm shuddering, but I liked it...