I just realized you were talking about two diffrent cars in the first chapter. It would be easyer to follow if you had them a seperate scenes instead of going back and forth. You could just mention that they happened at the same time.

Sorry. Not trying to be picky. just trying to help.

Will he get his memory back? I think he's cute this way. I like the 'Monk' joke.

Good start. You've got me worried.

I do have a couple of suggestions though. You are very good at dialoge, however I think a little more discription (for example; the two guys talking, what did they look like?) would improve your story. It would make the dialoge as well as the rest a little easyer to follow, and make it more suspenceful. (Like explaining how Sharona feels waking up in a flaming car)

I'm lost, as usual.

Kewl... but y all the numbers spliting different parts?

Hi,

I'm Sarah and I'm 12 years old. I really like this story. I was woundering... on your HP ones... If you could update just a tinsy winsy bit quiker. I don't care if you do or not though. I would just like it a little better.

Anyways... PLZ UPDATE ASAP! I really, really, really like this story.

Dawg! This fic is kicking so far! Adrian's so funny, too. I luv the earring thing...it's great - lol. Keep writing or I vill be very sad! lol

Okay, Pot Plant or Plant Pot or Plant that smokes Pot on a Stand: that's why we don't run into walls before we review good stories.

woot! awesome yet again! keep on going :)

This sucks. It's so out of character, so badly written. It's... It's... It's rushed! You jump from one spot to the next, you explain things without proper detail! My god, you call yourself a writter! Why are all these complete and utter morons saying it is good? Good idea maybe, badly written SO TRUE!

OH! poor Monk! I feel sorry Shorona too. The poor thing! One more thing, I can so see this happening on the show! Awesome story!

Yep, I really like this chapter. Was great. Especially the moment with dirt finger and Adrian screaming for a wipe. I really liked it, and as you say, going to read Mr Monk and the Toddler :]

I like it, especially Monk being even weirder than usual. I like the end there with Randy and the Captain where he's like..no Monk, you mean no Monk at all? It was really funny. Update soon!

You're welcome! I'm a little confused though, sometimes it seems that Adrian doesn't know who he or anyone else is, and then he seems to accept or remember everything. So I need to understand this, did he really lose some of his memory?

Another great chapter! I LOVED Monk pulling on Sharona's earring and acting like a little kid. I also adored the part where Disher calls him Monk and he whispers to Sharona,"He did it too!" I hope you continue with this story, my inspiration has kind of faded since they announced that they are writing Sharona out of the show :-( Hopefully your inspiration hasn't faded. Can't wait to read more!

Oh, I like this chapter a LOT. Keep on writing those chapters...just as funny as this one was. lol. Or even try to make it MORE funny.