very good story

First allow me to say this is an interesting tale. It seems far off from the episode but I guess that's why you called it a missing scene. But in the course of this missing scene alot happened. And alot still has to happen for the episode to continue as it did.

Now there is one thing that I noticed you got wrong in the events, and that's that the whale swiped its tale and sent the net onto Jonny, not Jonny accidentally pulling it onto himself. But that's hardly important.

I noticed a few typos, unfinished words, mispelled words, incorrect grammar and stlike it was a missing scene, something removed to save time and something that seemed unecessary in the whole to the episode. That was nice.

Oh and if you ever need a beta reader, look me up. I'm more than happy to help.