Wow, this is dark and beautiful, thank you!

I do believe that even if you weren't dead, you would be quite rich. :) Now, on to more seriousness...

Wow, this was just amazing. Even though it was short I felt like my emotions were meshing with hers, and it was quite a ride. I wish I could write more about how wonderfully intense emotionally that it was, but I can't even think of a proper enough thing to say. In any case, it was beautiful!

I loved it!

The ending was slighlty confusing though.

This is a beautiful, haunting tale. Though personally I don't believe in the ssex used in this story, I do believe it is vital. And sometimes a story must be told, no matter how much we hate what lies within. Te prince doesn't really have "sex" with her either. He rapes her. Which by no means condones his shall go on my favorites list. I think more people should read this personally. Sometimes the best stories are the ones we'd rather not end up hearing. Five stars easily!

In my opinion there, is no way that you can improve this story. It was very well written and I thoroughly enjoyed reading it.

That was beautiful. It really tested the traditional images associated with Cinderella! It gave her so much more character, and the story really came alive. Well, duh. And it was so sad. And usually I don't like stories that short, but this is a true exeption! Wow!

Excellent write.

First, I want to praise you for the superb word choice and beautiful vocabulary. It created a dramatic, dark effect to the fanfic that would have otherwise been more difficult to achieve.

The transformation of Vrielle is sharply contrasting - from the bitter, deprived girl who wasn't allowed to attend a ball, to a ice-hearted, cold, and darkly beautiful lady at the ball, and to a frantic, frightened girl afterwards.

The last lines were effective, and the entire story whispered of regret and angst. Well done.

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That's sad. A bit against my beliefs, it's good though.

Very good take on Cinderella. (furious clapping) Great job!

~Runt

P.S. They clothed her before the herald presented her, right?

you want feedback? here it is! WOW that was an unexpected twist, i really enjoyed it! well, the writing and story, not the whole princely sex thing he had going on. i dont know if u understand what im saying haha i barely do! but this is an excellently (is that a real word?) written story!

It was definately beautiful writing, although extremely tragic... even though I don't understand why the Prince helped her with her sucicide. I'm sorry, I'm just a bit slow today...

I absolutely loved it! Your wording was terrific, filled with implications, but I knew exactly what you were talking about. I liked how you changed the story and that all the changes made perfect sense. The prince was truly spine-tingling, which is a nice change (I always thought Charming was a little too wishy-washy). The end was the best, though. It's tragic, but satisfying in some way. I don't know what to say about changes that need to be made, it's much better than anything I could ever write.

wow! i am speechless. this is briallant, beautiful, amazing. i love it. so deep and unexpected, yet predicatable but not quite so. well im babling. its brillant!

wow! it's deep and beautiful. tragic, dark, but beautiful. i just love the use of poetry and imagery in this. very creative idea for the loss of slipper. good job!

one thing though, i think the story would end fine at the last 'free', because it gives the reader more to think about. to me, the last bits were not absolutely neccesary, but if you want, you can leave them where they are.

all i can say is wow. that was...i dont know how to describe it but i liked it. it was so...real. i really liked!