I liked Harry realizing that it was selfish of him to wish for Sirius' life back when it was such a miserable existence. It showed maturity.

THis is interesting... 'a wish was nothing.'

sadly to say, i don't really believe in that.

Hoping and wishing is the first part of really doing.

But, this is interesting.

very, very good! Beautiful! harry's got a lot of thoughts JK only touches on!

0_o...Very good Harry angst. Your skill amazes me! One thing: "deepest desired"-doesn't really work in the context you're trying to use it in. Try "He knew what he desired most" or something of the like.

How wonderful. Loved the bit about how "longing tore at his heart like a giant creature’s claws." Very good!