Please update as soon as possible, this story is really good_...

I LOVE this fic. And I beg of you to write more of this.

Hey, CharcoalCat! I didn't actually read your story, I just-hey, I will read it eventually! calm down!-So, I'm just saying, I think it's cool that your little sis has a Homestar Runner CD! I LOVE Homestar Runner! Have you ever been on the website? You should! Pshaw! I mean, come on! Who doesn't love Homestar! I command you to check out the Homestar Runner website (at If you don't, I won't read your story! So, CHECK IT OUT! HOMESTAR RUNNER ALL THE WAY!

TTFN

Katie _~

Wow...I'm truly speechless. I think the rating is fine and it took me a while to understand what happened...how exactly did Ryou die? I'll reread it to see if I missed it.. *sighs* so beautiful..made me all teary..

Foxfire: I have to say, if cheesecake makes you feel all warm and fluffy, I suggest you check the expiration date on it...

Kat: Aw, c'mon Foxfire, she didn't mean it literally. Hi Cola! We like to review for you! Sorry we didn't do it earlier... I've so been lagging behind on getting ANYTHING important done lately! Anyway. Such a sad chapter! I like the change of perspectives though, I love stories from Bakura's point of view. Aww, he misses Ryou, that's so sad. The story had some really funny parts in it though! Like that drunken argument was the best! Such language though. I think PG-13 is a good rating for language, my opinion is that you only have to up the rating from there if you're gonna include sex or really gory violence. But hell, by the age 13, all kids know the word "fuck."

Foxfire: The only suggestion I would make is to expand a bit more on that complicated little love triangle that seems to be going on. It was mentioned but I don't think anyone would have really noticed it unless they already knew of its existance. But that can wait for the next chapter. There will be a next chapter, won't there?

Kat: There he goes again... see, Foxfire thinks it's his duty to keep all fangirls working on their fanfictions. I have to listen to that every freaking day, except when Mick's distracting him. Guess I really ought to get to work on my story now, huh? Oh well. Loved this chapter, I think so far it's my favorite!

*sniff* Ryou's soul is torn. That's really sad. He doesn't deserve something like that. And it's really sad that he doesn't recognize Bakura anymore. So does that mean that his soul is still in the ring? That he hasn't moved on? *gets all teary-eyed and hugs a Ryou plushie close* I LIKE Ryou.

Bakura and Jou really are sweet. I never thought that I would read a story with a pairing like that, but you've got me hooked into this. Really good story.

And I was right! _ It was the sun and the moon. Well, according to Jou. If I was to ask Kura though, then it would be a different meaning. That story's kinda sad too. I mean the sun-boy and the moon-girl never get to be together? That was actually a good story too though.

I wanted to guess before reading the next chapter. The story kinda reminds me of the moon and the sun. Is that it?

Hello! I'm glad you're continuing this story. Heavens, have you seen a PG-13 rated movie lately? Not to mention listening to Teenage conversations in school or at the Mall, eek! Besides, sometime a profane word or two makes the point better than an entire dictionary ("It was... soap... poisoning!" - Ralphie, 'A Christmas Story'), and I'm certainly not one to throw stones, meh heh heh considering what Ryou yells at Kaiba in MY story (blatant plug!).

I like your sun & moon fable very much, classic folklore material in what I think might be an original presentation (I remember having to write a 'fable' in Junior High Lit class, I think it's a standard schhol assignment, and my daughter had to do one too, just last year!). Kudos.

I was a little confused about who was trying to molest who, and who was objecting, at the drunken birthday party... snicker!

As sad as I find the premise of the story (Ryou-chan dead! *sob*), I think it's very well written, and the Jou/YBakura relationship is very sweet.

Update when you can, please.

MCG

Aw, thats sad! T_T Is Ryou really dead? No! How did that happen? Write more, this is good!

CC

(Smiles) That was lovely in a bitter-sweet sort of way. Everyone was very IC, and it was a thoughtful read as well as well as an entertaining one.

Thanks for writing. Not bad for a first crack at fanfiction. _~

Foxfire: M, haven't we heard this story somewhere before?

Kat: Hush, silly! It's still a good story, and the point was, Bakura had NOT heard the story before. That's what he'd wanted, right? A story he hadn't heard before.

Foxfire: *nods* What's very interesting about this retelling of the story, is that the first time we heard it, it was Cola who told it to us. And this time, it was in Joey's voice, and that does make it interesting. Kind of like new. Is it hard to write with Joey's speech patterns?

Kat: Yes, it is! I've tried it before! But you did great with that Cola, you write Joey better than I do! Probably because he's your favorite, hmm? Okay, and here's my favorite line:

"And they put him on this big ball of energy and told him to make somethin' of it."

Kat: Kinda made me giggle. It's like, he is a being who had to create, because... he had to. Anyway, I'm glad you wrote a second chapter, this was a lot of fun to read! And I got to review for you AGAIN! Lookit me be all happy and giddy!

Was it Bakura? It sure SOUNDED like it was Bakura who was sitting at the grave. At the very beginning I thought that it would be Yami, but then it didn't really seem like it was. You did a really good job with Katsuya.

RYOU! *glomps the white-haired tenshi* NO! *begins to cry*

Kat: Oh my heck! It finally happened! My dream, my glorious dream has come true!

Foxfire: *wandering in* What are you squealing about now?

Kat: *points* Look look! Cola wrote a fanfic! And I get to review for HER for once! I think I'm even the first one! Okay, you sit down and help.

Foxfire: O...'kay... *sits down* I've never done a review before.

Kat: Don't worry, I've studied all Cola's reviews, I know what I'm doing. *clears her throat* This was awesome! I love the way you wrote it in fist person, and still kinda had Joey talking with his accent. And I like how you never really mentioned any names! Only kind of hinting about who they were.

Foxfire: Who died? Was it Ryou? I'm assuming it was, since you never mentioned Bakura by name and I'm only guessing it was him from the "klepto" remark.

Kat: I'm pretty sure it was Ryou, Cola said she was gonna kill him.

Foxfire: *blinks* But Ryou's mine! She said I could have him!

Kat: Oh chill out, if you're that upset, you can go cuddle him later. Aww, Bakura wants a story? That's so cute! And I love how he comes to visit the grave, that's so sad. He misses his little former-host, does he? Everybody seems to need hugs... 'Cept Joey, he seems to be doing alright.

Foxfire: I will have to say that my favorite part is how Bakura seems to have stolen both Joey's jacket and shirt. Did he steal Joey's pants too?

Kat: Well, you can save that for a sequel. Anyway, I love the story! I hope my review makes you smile, like all yours have done for me. Ta-ta!