This is at least the forth story I've read. While your prose is nice, it feels like you're just putting out pretty words and not really trying to tell a story. (Sorry... I'm going through the older Bleach fics right now, and your stories are what I'm finding right now.)

You know, I really want to ship Ichihime, but people keep writing Ishihime so well...particularly you. This is excellent, no two ways about it. I really liked how you wrote Ishida, and your very accurate observations about Orihime. Great job!

Love this one too - now mourning how Orihime always pays attention to Ichigo, even though that relationship could only hurt her, and never pays attention to Ishida. :(

But a very good little fic, lets us get inside the mind of a complex and complicated character who needs more love.

Hmmm. You have some random explanations(for the reader? or maybe just Uryu's observations?) about Orihime's hair and her hairclips that seemed slightly disjointed("her hair- long, long because of(for) Tatsuki...", "...gift from her brother, though she didn't like them...", and "They are not exactly scouting and not exactly not.").

Ishida has a good point on whether or not the Shun Shun Rikka are a race... perhaps similar to a zanpakuto as they are the form of her spiritual power?

All in all, very sweet musing on Ishida's part!

SS

Only one thing to say... Adorable. Completely adorable. 3

ishida is so sweet in this, almost poetic. orihime is well orihime. who else?

i love the idea of Ishida and Orihime falling in love (*sigh*), so i really liked this story

I havent checked out ur other stories yet, but i think you should write some more adventures between these two.

cya

Aw.

i love the last part! ;)

"i could listen to your voice forever..."

that's from Ishida to Orihime, right? :D

I like the idea, but I'm not quite use to present tense...it sounds a bit weird to me, but like I said, I don't read many fanfics in present tense.

Very good. :)

Hi! This is nice! Short and nice and cute! Can't believe this story is three years old!

All the best!

Ai Lee

::looks at the impressive amount of stories and realises that there are no half-assed unfinished ones:: A writer who writes! Hallelujah! And boy can you write. Love this fic, love the wording, now love the pair, LOVE YOU (right now). Fabulous job, this gave me shivers.

I loved it. I can't quite say why, but I did.

OMIGOSH! Thank you so much for this peice! I love this! AND I LOVE ISHIME PAIRINGS! TY TY TY!

Ah! Ishida's so SWEET! I must THANK Moonsheen because Bleach fics are GOOD eatin'. Yum.

Thank you.