Nice, after all that drama between them I'm glad Jimmy and Cindy ended up together in the end.

Oh Cindy, I just know Lou is gonna take advantage of Jimmy not remembering anything involving Lou. You should have just destroyed the memory eraser because right now it looks like erasing Jimmy's memories works in Lou's favor.

A magnificent ending to your finest story yet. I wasn't sure it would surpass "In Brightest Day, In Darkest Night", but the final few chapters clinched it. I really like the characters of Lou and Angelo, especially the latter. The epilogue was just beautiful, especially once Jimmy and Cindy started dancing and Lou and Angelo talked. I hope one day you'll write a third story, maybe even shelving Jimmy and the gang to focus on Angelo and Lou.

Again, great job. You should be proud of all the amazing stories you've written and how people still talk about you after all of these years.

It's interesting how you write Jimmy as if he's a superhero. The whole "with great power comes great responsibility" thing, as well as the fact that as soon as he takes a day off things hit the fan. It's sad because it sounds like he genuinely wants to go to the dance with Cindy, but he's worried about what might happen to his town if he let his guard down.

The best thing about this chapter was the paragraph that began with "It depends. I knew someone once who had everything he could have wanted in life."

I have a feeling that the person Angelo was describing was Lou, but to me it also clearly reflected Jimmy. The knowledge that if Cindy were to leave him he would never truly recover was heartbreaking.

I like your references to old science fiction work, such as The Cold Equation and To Serve Man. If you could ever find a way to work in The Last Question by Isaac Asimov, I'd be ecstatic.

Obviously the last part of this chapter was heartbreaking and superbly written, so I'll merely say my favorite line was "I think that things will always work out if you're around." It seems like so long ago in this story we were dealing with Lou Cipher.

As usual, another excellent ending. Jimmy is infallibly good, and he will always do what is right.

You have no idea how happy I was to see you mentioning Ernest. I absolutely loved In Brightest Day, In Darkest Night, and I'm glad to see you haven't forgotten about his character.

For a book and a half now, you've shown Lou as a very calm and collected evil force. It was a real treat to see him let this mask down during his conversation with Cindy. Although I wonder if he's telling the truth about Jimmy being unable to form even a geometry proof. I did that in ninth grade. Did Jimmy's device really alter his intelligence THAT much?

A really chilling ending to this chapter. You really have an incredible knack for suspense, but then again you have the same knack for writing character interactions. I truly hope you're using your talents. Have you published or worked on an original book yet?

I enjoyed reading Lou's explanation of what love really is to Jimmy. I also appreciated how Libby's first thought after hearing of Cindy's stalker was to ask Jimmy for help. While I don't ship the two, I do ship their friendship, and I'm always glad when another points out how the two seem to respect each other and share something. And as usual, you wrote the J/C conversations flawlessly.

Two very funny moments within the first few paragraphs. Loved Jimmy giving up on waiting for his feelings to disappear after fifteen seconds, as well as Goddard ordering Jimmy to give him his aluminum can.

I liked how you tried to reconcile the fact that although Sheen and Carl clearly exhibit crushes they still give no thought to girlfriends.

"What I say about Neutron is one thing," she said fiercely. "What I think about him is another."

I really liked these lines. It reinforces how Cindy is pretty much just acting her disgust for Jimmy at this point. And I'm not sure if you meant it this way when you wrote it, but it really hit home to me how all of these stories are interlinked, since they usually end with Cindy thinking something very nice about Jimmy.

The first chapter to this story was excellent. Again, you have an unparalleled knack for writing humor as well as for perfectly capturing the essence of each character. Favorites from this chapter include Sheen's confusing his dream with reality and Carl weakly crying Scapula from inside the fountain. And of course, Lou's catchphrase is bone-chilling.

I really loved this story! And I especially liked how you put christian aspects into it. You are a really good writer and I hope to read more of your stories.

So far I have loved all of your Jimmy Neutron stories, and I can only really find two errors within your writing. But I feel that these two mistakes cost your stories greatly, especially after reading this chapter.

A personal vedetta I have against hero stories is that there seems to only ever be room for one hero. It seems that Cindy, (and all of the other characters, for that matter,) is constantly relegated to the roll of damsel in distress. She is not as smart as Jimmy, obviously, but, in the show, her will is just as strong as, if not stronger at times, then Jimmy's will. I believe that you ignore this in favor of letting Jimmy, and Jimmy alone, be the hero. Even in your Earnest story, in the end, it was only Jimmy who made the important self-sacrifice and proved himself a hero, whom everyone else needs to be saved by. Heroes can exist without someone needing them to exist.

Secondly, and most importantly I believe, is the emotional side of your stories. Obviously you have quite a lot of knowledge and wisdom in the science field. Because of this, your plots are all very in-depth and well thought out. However, like Jimmy, I am starting to suspect that you rely too much on your intellect and not enough on your emotional instinct. Your stories follow the exact same emotional rollercoster for every single story, and your characters have become somewhat flat because of this. This is why your JN stories have become predictable, not just in how the characters are going to react, but in what plot-point you are going to introduce to mold your characters' emotions so that they will follow the story that you want them too. Your stories are all plot driven, not character driven. This is not necessarily a bad thing, but it will limit you on what you are able to write.

Like I said, I have loved all of your stories I've read up to this point, but there is always room for improvement. I hope you take this as a compliment within a suggestion instead of as an insult within a critique.

Well, I've taken to rereading your stories (and given how great they are, that's not such a big surprise), and I forgot how much I love this one in particular. It's always amazing how you know so much about all these various subjects, how you're so dedicated to making the subjects sound realistic...and you've heard me go on and on about your characterizations in other reviews, so I'll spare you. Anyway, I especially loved this epilogue. In any other story the last few lines would be considered cheesy, but you pulled it off perfectly. And it's so true. I had never really thought about it that way before: that they can't stand to lose, so one way or another they will make it work out.

Anyway, just here to say a friendly hello, and I'm still looking forward to your next story, and I'll be waiting patiently, whether it's posted in several days or several years.

Hope everything's going well!