this whole story is basically a romance instead of the Magian thing. at least choose one plot instead of making the main focus of the story a sub plot

This fanfic is older than me, by like a month

Dear professor,
Maybe one should not catalog Ash as a pokemon. You can still treat him entirely like a human without classifying him as a Pokémon. Wow. That is not moral in any way.

So everything is going great until you reach chapter 13 then it just gets ridiculous to summarize my already review that I posted I rewrite would be great just remove song of the add-on characters like someone said this went from Pokemon to Harry Potter in a couple of seconds

The first of all the possibility for evolution in the human Pokemon idea concept was pretty cool haven't seen that one before but the story just got ridiculous when you added more characters it was too much to follow and you made things go ridiculous especially making everyone forget and adding more people like ash it just doesn't work I'm sure you could have tried something else but I don't know like maybe you sent them continuing honest Adventures where he levels up or maybe continuing the work was the professor and how they evolved or we having him get captured by Team Rocket I don't know but adding more characters didn't work maybe you could go back and rewrite this all in all it was a great idea until it got messed up

No offense, but why doesn't Ash remember who Giovanni is?

i have an o.c like your magians. he is very powerful though and the only similarity is that he is part pokemon and immortal.

I love this story! You’ve done an excellent job, there are some spots early on that the pace drags a bit too much, but it clears up after we meet Ken. Overall this is one of the better fan fictions I’ve read and now have reread _

I love how, despite the fact that Ash is evidently the Kanto champion, no one knows who he is. And the people who DO know who he is still don't treat him with any respect.

Yeah...that was great! Nice plot, good storyline management, and to top it all off the story is COMPLETED! Don't see *nearly* enough of that with the good stories. Sure, I would have liked the ending to draw out a little bit further, but it worked out how it did pretty well, so I can't really complain.

One thing I will complain about, though: typos. You had tons, frfom misspelling words, to writing two forms of a sentence at once, to completely omitting words or even half a word. You really ought've done better editing. And it's not even that difficult, just basic editing. Which I'm sure you did, but perhaps looking back on it at a later date would have been more beneficial.

Regardless, I say this story has been one of my favorites. Great job!

“Gee, Ken what are we going to do tonight?”
“The same thing we do every night ash”
“Try to take over THE WORLD!”
“Cough cough... fly, I said fly, we try to teach you how to fly”

Slate is Brock's ancestor

It is good. There is really not much else to say ... except ... Sequel? Maybe?

Great story. I plan to start my own would you please review and see what you think?

uh, dafuck was the starting line break?