Had to correct myself "you're welcome" in Japanese is Dōitashimashite

The Japanese for thank you is Arigatō

Right Batman is going to let a guy he doesn't know go away after he broke into his house? That broke your story for me. He would have tied him up then called the police or justice league or whatever. I like that you at least tried to explain why they don't go to Salem, but by then I wasn't buying your story anyways.

Ah Ministry Incompetence at its finest... Brilliant.

Honestly, I feel like you need to choose between serious adventure or mere parody. Lol. You have serious moments, but sometimes they get utterly obliterated by behavior or lines that are simply totally OC or out of hand... Many times these moments are moments which would get the person looked at oddly and dismissed from ever having any power or prestige... Malfoy's behavior for example trying to get out of the charge is absolutely ridiculous...

Though I do love the fact that you called him the most incompetent terrorist ever... SO TRUE! Voldemort and his Death Eaters are one of the worst excuses of villains known to grace literature.

Ah one thing I should point out that I forgot to say for chapter 2

"About fifty years ago, a Dark Wizard appeared,

Voldemort appeared in the late 60s, but people only took note of him by the 70s. Meaning only 30 years.

Amanda seemed a bit too upbeat about the battle, but w/e... The play by play battle was quite funny lol. Though I feel like you skipped out on the getting funds from Gringotts part, and randomely decided to change your attention to the battle, upon which most muggles would probably not care one way or another at this point of time.

i know bruce wayne is the father, but who is the mother? and where is alfred? other than that, good story.

good

I Like it ended perfect

what a cliffy

I like Sprink being a werewolf, nice twist

Very good writting is improving, still not much description on scene changes but getting better

Very good, your numbers deserve to be much higher

Better as you go along. Story is good, Mattie isn't acting 10years though