Hot topic used to have cool punk clothes now it's disney...

Random but I also hate maths

Would have been funnier if Inuyasha and Sesshomaru were brothers. Lol.

Wow so much action and then boom! Peace

hahaha "Shh I'm eating!"

I couldn't stop laughing for most of this chapter :D please tell me it sticks!

umm didn't you say she drove a car to school?

Um...

Okay, the thing is, it actually sounds like a decent story, but your writing is bad. You're misspelling things, not capitalizing first names, and not putting commas and periods in the right places. I realize such things can happen once in a while and you don't catch it, but in just the first chapter it was so constant it pulled me out of the story.

Also, the dialogue is very stereotypical. Nobody in real life talks like that, and it's a bit of an annoying quality in the story. Preps don't wear gallons of perfume and make fun of everyone who wears black, and punks aren't always ticked off and looking for a fight. It's all very stereotypical to me.

I'm not trying to be mean, honestly! I just think it's poorly written and full of stereotypes, and I think there are others who agree with me. But it seems like a pretty good story, just needs technical improvements. :)

WAAAAH! So sad, but awesome! I love it!

Smiles from

~ Ardemia

Your view of 'punks' is highly warped...and you called Kagome punk to begin with then switched her to gothic, there is a difference between the two. Punk died out in the 80's. The writing is crap, horrible grammar and that was just what Iread of the first chapter. This is an insult to punk/emo/goth/scene...whatever you want to call us...everywhere!

THAT IS SO INSULTING TO PUNKS! We don't care what we look like, and even PREPS aren't like that. The words... well, sounded like a three year old who learned a new swear word. Being punk is about being WHO YOU WANNA BE! That was so stereotype! I can tell the outcome, and the only thing I liked was the monkey shirt, but it's been used in GOOD fanfics. I hate it, and I showed my friends, and their words impress sailors! They now hate you, saying, "Little preppy bitch!" So get a clue, and quit INSULTING US! God I quit reading at the first few lines... And nobody talks like that. We say real stuff, and that was like first grade stories. I've read better, but I think your's may be the WORST.

that was sincerly really good. didnt turn out anything like i thought it would. which is really good because there are alot of stories that seem to be done a million times. this ones different, uniqe. i loved it.

oh f***ck

how could u not remeber wat ur love looked like in only 4 years and woulded u remeber her vice

i dont think inuyashas bring fair cause at least miroku iz crying cause hes hurt tew