This is probably the most random review ever but I find one thing funny.
Ron is 5' 11'' but he is 15. I am 5' 11'' and I turned 13 a little over a month ago

Update more chapters about this story,because it's the best,extra and the great story that I was reading about it,and I am also starting to love and to like reading to this story. So can you please write more chapters,because I want to know what happens in the next chapters about it. THANKS SO MUCH FOR WRITTEN TO THIS STORY,thanks so much about it.&&&£££%%%$$$

yeah. I has taken you 15 years and your NOT done yet?

Good

Please update soon :)

Noooooononononononooooooonononononooooo you scared meeeeeeeee omg I had a mini heart attack *sighs in relief* I'll be sure to check that ouT!

i love your story, but maybe you can break it into smaller paragraphs so its easier to read. Other than that, I think that it is perfect! *_*
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I love how right away you set the scene in terms of where we are in the timeline. It's nice to not have to try to guess how old Harry is or where in the series this takes place. :)

A Reverse Charm sounds awfully convenient. I wonder if maybe it'll backfire in some way that they're not expecting if it's that dangerous. Shame, you'd think they would've learned something about messing with the timeline. D:

"planing" should be "planning". "back into time" should be "back in time". 'Dumbledor" should be "Dumbledore". "their was this big" should be "there was this big".

Hmm, if the spell is so dangerous and powerful and wizards have died attempting it, why would a fourth-year wizard, almost fifth-year, decide right off the bat that he could perform it?

This is an interesting start to the story!

its good plz update soon

If you're no in the common rooms you'll be expelled?! What?! That's the most un-Dumbledore-like thing I've ever read in a fanfic.

And why would Lily ask James to forgive her? More than a little confusing.

And lastly, Dumbledore would never just blurt out, especially to James, Sirius, Lily and Peter, that Harry is the only person who can save them all. And besides he fact that he would never slip up in that way, though he'd certainly reprimand them on judging him for his Parselmouth abilities, and probably remind them that Lupin was a werewolf, how could the Marauders have known that Harry was their last hope? Another reason Dumbledore wouldn't have said that.

Oh, and in the books Lily and James didn't get together until seventh year, when James was more mature. In you'd story they're only fifth year.

Okay, this story just went totally out the figurative window! What on earth has been happening?!

I seriously doubt that just because Lily was not all out verbally attacking Harry like the others, that James would think she loved him, and not James. I mean, the guy had been there for less than a day. That was the first 'What on earth?' moment.

I would also expect Lily to fight his accusation a little more. An out of the blue accusation based on no real evidence is something that she seems the sort of person to disagree with, and make that disagreement known. And breaking down into tears right after he leaves? The books definitely give he impression that Lily was a weepy, weak-willed girl who would not blame James for jumping to a conclusion so out-there.

And seriously? Lily then decides to punch Harry, because it's his fault? I don't think that 'the brightest witch in her year', as called by Slughorn, would reach a conclusion that ridiculous.

That part is definitely leaving something to be desired.

Arabella Figg is a Squib. This means she has no magic, though she was born to magical parents. As she has no magic, she never would have attended Hogwarts.

Additionally, she is an old lady, and if she ever was to attend Hogwarts, she would have graduated by the time the Marauders were in fith year, at the very latest.

And don't you think it would have been more likely that James and Sirius would have gone with Lily?

You have unnecessary parts throughout this chapter. For instance, why would Dumbledore visit simple to tell the Marauders that 'No, he hasn't woken up.' I would also think he would send Fawkes with a letter, or perhaps another student he saw.

Also, when Peter was obviously making light about how Harry had landed on him, and the reasons he had, why would Lupin ask if Peter was going to blame Harry?

Arabella Figg can't be one of Lily's friends at Hogwarts, she's a squib

once again pretty cool chapter