I like that machine.

Aw, Ed.

Keep it up! 8DDDDD

i love this :3

And suddenly, Ed is the most interesting character.
Is he a mind reader? Is he just really good at guessing stuff? Can he read people really well? How did Double-D get that blood as pale? Why is Ed's memory so shitty? Anyway, Rolf's little anecdote is what makes this story for me, really.

Cute story so far

I have to point out:

Rolf's goat is named Victor. His Pig is named Wilfred.

Awesome fic. I love it. Especially since the characters are in-characters as well. Or at least the first chapter they were. XD

Yeah, this story is also old. :P

But I read the whole thing on AFFnet and... it may have been the fact that I'm a bit tipsy, but the entire time I was reading this story my heart was just in my THROAT. I had to choke back the sheer awesomeness of your literature. I seriously had to close my laptop on several occasions, grab for the nearest fluffy thing, and roll around like a luv-struck schoolgirl. Just the sheer amazing... awesomeness (I really can't think of a better word right now) would become to much for me that I had to take mini-breaks before I e'sploded with utter glee. :3 *deep breath*...

Not once was I rocked off the boat; the setting and characters and plot... was all so perfect. The scenes were so strong and vivid in my mind that I had to recollect myself at points.

Baw, look at me going on and on... You prolly even forgot about this fic you wrote heheheh. :) You're just awesome. 3

YOU GODDAMN MOTHERFUCKING SON OF A WHORE-SHIT EATING BITCH! I WILL FUCKING EAT YOU FOR WRITHING THIS GODDAMN MOTHERFUCKING FANFICTION! FUCKING KILL YOURSELF, YOU UNDERSTAND? YOU FUCKING QUEER-ASSED PEICE OF SHIT, YOU ASS-RETARDED MOTHERFUCKER! GOD DAMN YOU TO HELL, GOD DAMN YOU TO HELL AND YOU DIE! COWAFUCKIN PIECE OF DOG SHIT, THIS STORY IS DIARRHEA CUMIN OUTTA MY DICK, THIS FIC IS AS APPEALING AS A DIRTY FUCKIN, OOZE INFESTED SEWER RAT SHIT, I'VE HAD MORE FUN PLAYING WITH DAWG TURDS! YOUR MOM IS MY ASS AND YOUR FACE IS MY BALLS, THIS FIC IS AN INSIDE OUT ASSHOLE REGERGITATED PUTRID ANAL FECALMATTER! I'D RATHER FUCKIN YANK ALL THE HAIRS OUTTA MY SCROTUM! I'D RATHER DIRNK DIARRHEA VOMITTED OUTTA A BUFFALO'S DICK! I'D RATHER FUKIN BLOW LEPRECHAUNS! IT SUCKIN FUCKS, IT FUCKIN SUCKS, IT FUCKIN BLOWS, ITS A PIECE OF SHIT, and I don't like it... SO GO FUCK YOURSELF PERVERT! 8- ()8

YOU REALLY SURE LIKE TO WRITE STORIES ABOUT LITTLE 12 YEAR OLD BOYS FUKIN EACH OTHER... PEDOPHILLE!

You know Double D, you don't always have to do everything your parents say. You can be spontanious every once in a while!

*pokes toe at pile of melted-Edd-goo* Is he gonna be alright?

*edging away slowly* Whats with the eyes? Is he O.K.?

No!

Why!

Why did you end it?

WHAT DO MEAN NOT REALLY! YOU HAVEN'T UPDATED IN TWO YEARS! As far as I can see, this is the end. Oh god, why END?

Wonderful idea you came up with for this...originality's important when there are so many fics out there dedicated to similar shippings. I also love the "ability" you gave Ed to tap into his two friends' feelings; it's very believable. Now I'm off to Adultfanfiction to read the rest!

I have somethings to comment on. It may sound like a flame for most of the review, but I'm just starting with the stuff I disagree with. One Victor is a goat, not a pig, a goat. If you want the name of one of Rolf's pigs it's Wilfred. Two, even if you converted Double D to boxers, I do not know of anyone who would wear black sick ones in an everyday setting. Believe me, I love picturing Double D older, long black hair, in silk black boxers, but there is a time and a place. It was the place but not the time. Three, to stop one from falling flat on their face, I think it would be alot easier to simply catch them then thrusting their body underneath to brake the fall. Four, I adored, nah, loved the part when Double D started stripping. It reminded me when he actually did in the show with the help of the boomarange. In both cases Eddy's reactions are priceless. I could just imagine in your fan fic his cartoon eyes growing to the size of dinner plates to see Double D half naked. Five, I LOVE how you made Double D say "Messy, messy, messy." That is so in character it is great! I love how you made him just pour over that mess Eddy made. It was adorable. Very cute picturing Double D cleaning Ed's blood and picking pieces of glass out of the carpet. I'm surprized Double D didn't notice Eddy was lacking of the shirt. Aw... Eddy's fat with out a shirt. In the show. Not in your head. Or mine.

update then