What. The. F- *Hell. Damn, I guess for some stories there just aren't any happy ending. And, I think that it's interesting. Not every story has to have a happy ending, and this one sure as hell didnt't. I liked it. It was realistic.

OMG! Beautiful, horrible and wonderful at the same time :()

wow, that is beautiful.
I read this story last year and I loved it

So sad... You're an amazing author. I love your penname, too. *grins like an idiot*

Love,

Emily

Sad but cool. I like your fandoms - I've never read Bradbury fanfics before. Have you read "A Sound of Thunder"?

~EP41 :)

Lots of detail...I like it!

-duckie-of-wlw

wow-that was really good, in a creepy way.

V. strange. More strange than ur other stories. 2 grim. I like ur other stories better, especially the just plain silly ones. Stop writing grim ones like this one and On Display! blech!

-Flails- Totally and utterly angsty. Now, to some people that would be a bad thing...

Not to me. _

Mine was written as a school project as well, though I can't remember if I put that anywhere.

Anyway, I liked your fic. I think at times, shorter sentances would've done in place of longer, more complex ones, but I can't really say anything to that: I'm guilty of doing the same on a frequent basis.

Gladly, that's the only flaw I have to point out. It was marvelously well written, and the ending was an interesting new take. Kudos.

-Sam

Whoa. I remember reading All Summer in A Day for school. I like the way you kept the gloomy atmosphere and everything. It's really good.

Whoa. That's really good! You've done well at extrapolating an end to this tale. The tone is much the same here as it is in the original story (if I'm remembering the original correctly), and that in itself deserves praise. Mimicking tone is not easy, but you've done it.

AS othershave said This was Even sadder than the orginal. I had no Idea others had the me,ory of this story from school Now Gotta find that other person's Happy Verison.

I had to do this for an assignment for school. My was happy where she punched William in the nose and returned bak to Earth a year later. Yours was just too depressing...

Very well written, I read this story in my seventh grade class. Did you go to Hoover Middle School? That's where I went and we read this story.
I think you captured her emotions greatly, but it was a bit wordy- but not overly so. I liked this story a lot and it is a credit to your name. Do you enjoy Ray Bradbury's story? If so, feel free to email me, I like them too.

Nasty, very nasty...almost completely unsentimental, put over straight as anything. This affected me more than the original story, I think. Well done.