big fan of melissa and her kurz! thanks for making this good call!

nice story

anyway i just finished reading your third chapter and i was wondering do you lern German or something? Cause you did use a german sentence even though i can't quite make out what you mean *gg* and i'm austrian.

keep the good work up!

Pretty cute so far!

Dude! What happened! This is such an awesome story... I know it's not over yet, so give! Where's the next chapter?

I hope to read the end of this story sometime soon in the future. Great job!

Perpetual

You were like a tom clancy fanfic author, I was learning military history on the side while reading your fanfiction. You got a lot of information spillin out

wow, been 3 yrs since u updated, please do so again

woot! XD That was awesome. XD I hope you update soon!

hey, i was wondering if you were alive, and if so, if you could finish the story. love it so far, just re-read it from a while back. love the kurzxmao chemistry you're developing.

T_T PLEASE POST NEXT CHAPTER T_T I LOVE THIS AND IVE READ IT TWICE THROUGH! MORE MORE MORE!

A fun story. I think you are stretching thier characters a little, but nothing unforgivable. The lyrics are sometimes jarring, placed where they are, though.

Keep up the good work.

lol! Some crazed soldiers would wear ears for a necklace. Mao has testicles for earrings. :p

Finally got to read this. It's got a few typos, but not too bad. My favorite parts were Mao's threats. They were really funny.

A lot of internalization before stuff actually happened. I guess that can go either way. Personally, I like to see the story getting underway quicker, but from what I can tell, this story is very focused on internalization, so I guess that's how it's going to be.

And that being the case, the characterization was done pretty nicely. I suppose you're trying to point out the deeper side of Kurz personality, beyond the perverted playboy. It's hard for me to imagine him like this, actually. Not that I don't think there's more too him. Just that he seems so unsure and vulnerable in this. To me, confidence has always been an unwavering characteristic of Kurz. But... let's see how this plays out. Maybe you can justify it.

There was one part where it said that he was litterally hit in the face with a beer bottle. Where'd it come from? And he didn't seem to react to it. I'm wondering if it wasn't quite litteral.

Otherwise, it's really nicely written and very entertaining. Reading on.

...update now...*checks back 5 minutes later* ...update now... *5 more minutes* ...update please...

When does the next chapter come out? I WANNA READ THIS!

This is beyond brilliant! It is superbly written, its well paced, its sharp and witty and fresh, the interaction between Kurz and Melissa is nothing short of sublime, and it actually centres on them rather then on Kaname and Sousuke. I mean, don't get me wrong, i love Kaname and Sousuke as much as the next FMP fan, but Kurz and Melissa really are underapreciated. It was so refreshing to read this but i notice that you haven't updated for quite a while. I hope you haven't abandoned it, as i really am enjoying it. I look forward to reading the next chapter if and when it comes (c'mon, don't make me beg!) Take care!

pretty. fav