XD clara deserved it. both the slap and the "shut up spell" *sighs* i want that spell...

It's DAINE! Not DIANE!

I love this story! i love miri and evin and you made them just like in my head1 thank you so much.

3 LOVE IT

This story definately has potential (I'm not done reading it) and I'd like to read more, though I've found some errors, nothing big, that you might want to fix. I really like how you describe things, and the fact that you're so descriptive is great! Super job on that!

"...feel like their skins was going to crack and blister at any moment"

Try something like: feel like their skins were, or feel like their skin was.

and:

“Raindrop? Could you please bite our prestige, Commander for me?”

It should be something like:

"Raindrop? Could you please bite our prestigious Commander for me?" You don't need the comma, and prestige is the wrong form of the word.

“but who could survive months of listening to Evin talk about his new love at court”.

There should be a question mark after court.

Also, the second half of this sentence seems to be a bit odd, though perhaps that's just me.

But she whispered into Daine’s ear, “But it is truly awful,” which brought the girls into a fit of giggles and a pouting Evin.

Overall, your punctuation and grammar could use a bit of work (perhaps a beta would help?) but then again, who am I to complain. I'm sure my own stuff's not much better.

Either way, I'm going to read more of this. I like where it's going.

"...drown saving a stormwing.” Daine laughed at the image.

Does this sound right to you?

Yeah, thank her (I'm guessing it's a her) for me. I could barely read there were so many mistakes! *(dripping)sarcasm*

AWSOME! luv it! luv it! luv it! luv it! luv it!

Very cute so far! I like it a lot.

~Amanda

Wonderful story! EVIN AND MIRI FLUFF 4 LIFE!( And plus a plot, which is an added bonus. )

i love it. i think im gonna cry. it's so happy! i wish i could be that happy...

this is so satisfying to read. (music nerd applauds happily)

first the fic made me feel all warm and fuzzy... but then dang it! this fic has made me all wistful. i want my own happy ending too! i guess i'll write one for myself.

wow. good job. label me impressed and ship me to carthak! bravo! or brava! whatever you are... im too lazy to try to find out from you profile... so just pick the one that fits...

I love this stor! It is really really really really really good! Ur an excellent writer...keep up the great work! So cute...very good job at keeping the right personalities for Evin and Miri! Your story made me laugh out loud, cry, and glued me to the computer until I finished it! I loved it!

I really enjoyed reading this. You did an awesome job!

Aww. Evin's so romantic!

It's Daine, not Diane.