Amei. Mmmmm lindo ...ñnmmifvbhh arrasou

Fairly incoherent, but I did get that Snape drug-raped her. Sorry, won't believe it of him.

This was heartbreaking. it's was well written

Waaaaah! Why is it over!

The letter was good. You may want to put other letters in italics, but other than that I like your story!

I like this prologue for the story.

I have to say something. Just because a son is very similar in appearance to his father doesn't mean that he is an copy of him or has been genetical gifted with exact same thing, greasy hair or characteristics things like rubbing once place between the eyes.

Except from this (which where I get annoyed at from all similar stories with HP fathers) the story seems interesting so far.

? I am so confused right now

What do you mean nine and a half pages?
-D.J

I'm french and I think that my english scholar grammar was better than your... Take a beta dude! You really need it!

I think there should have been a little more focus on Harry's childhood. I mean they had a ton of occlumency lessons together, there's no doubt snape saw it. and what, he didn't do anything about it? I get that you mention it here, but I really think it should have had a bigger impact on their relationship that is elaborated on.

Beautiful story.

Brilliant!

I loved reading the Seacret meanwhile I'm reading the Redment

i don't understand why he was marked teen or not. What kind of a father would let their child go through that. it does not make any sense at all. i have a feeling it is going to be one of those things which remain hanging when the story ends. and you end up saying why was he really marked?