I used to that this story was good back in the day, however looking upon it now, this story had major issues what little plot there was got sidetracked by this and that. Grammar issues here and there. .; this isn't a flame but has changed alot. We have beta readers now: please get one. The idea you have for the story was really good and it looks like you can do a LOT BETTER.

Again, this is not a flame and please don't brag like that on the summary. Your story is far from the best... FAR

This is such a good story. Update soon. .

...please put me out of my misery, or FIX THIS.

There's no plot that I can see, your grammar and spelling could use some /serious/ work, like, finishing grade school, and your dialogue and basically everything else is for the shits.

*sigh* Sorry sorry, but really, you can do /so much better/. Find a beta, or a friend who gets good grades in English and have them teach you a little bit about grammar. And I know that just because you didn't use capitalization here doesn't mean you don't know how to at all, but stuff like that makes a HUGE contribution to the overall quality of the story. Please don't let reviews blow your head up, and know that stories are never perfect, can always be improved, and maybe 'awesome' to some, but that doesn’t mean it is to others.

If you still care anything about this fic, I recommend starting over from scratch with that friend with good grades reading everything you write as you write it- these chapters are not salvageable. Ideas? Yeah. Anything else? No way in hell.

And lastly, it's okay to joke around about your story kicking ass, but don't say BEST STORY IN THE WORLD or whatever, especially when it SUCKS ass more than it KICKS.

I didn't get past the first chapter, you're in DESPERATE need of a beta. More often thatn not you spelt 'Sora' with a lower case 's'. I know that you havn't updated this story in over a year, and you're probably smarter and more mature now, but perhaps you can go over your story and make it so other people can enjoy even if you no longer old interest?

Before I start reading this fic, I wanted to tell ou that your sunnary is very off puting. The fact that you wrote in capitals that 'your story is the best' made me cringe. Your story may not be the best, don't go telling people it is. I know that I can't write for shit, but that doesn't mean I want someone telling me what is and isn't the best. An author(ess) should never say their story is the best, it;s just wrong.

I don't mean to sound nasty and horrible, but you can't go showing off like that.

I started reading this story LONG before I even made my own account! Wherever you are, PLEASE UPDATE! I am IN LUFF with this story!

Hope to see more soon _

I'm usually logged in, but I'm just too sleepy at the moment, so please forgive informality.

You have a wonderful idea here. I love the way you divided up the world (land, water and air). I don't think I've seen it done in a fic before. And their pasts were very creative. I really enjoyed those parts!

I think the biggest distraction to the plot was the unfinished feeling. This story has so much potential, and I really think that with some polishing it could be a real gem. Do you have a beta reader? I've worked with betas occassionally, and I definitely notice an improvement in my writing when I have someone to hash it out with. A good place to find a beta (if you need one) is betareadg/ (spaces revoved, naturally), and there's plenty of other places with similar listings if you don't find someone you can work with there.

I look forward to seeing more from you!

~Moon Faery

Well girlfriend? What are you waiting for? Why are you keeping this kick ass story lying like this? Update and update quick!

-BDP

This story is so amazing, you've got some serious talent. Please update!

Good chapter! No it's not good it's awesome! I love ur story/

NO, I need more hot Riku on Sora action! This story is so fooly-cooly, so ginta, so kick-a**. Add more and update!

Please update soon! _

LOVE LVOE LOVE YOU FIC! JUST KEEP GOING JUST KEEP GOING!_

Hey there. Just reviewing to tell you this story rocks! You've got to update as soon as possible. But I do have some questions. One, do you like Eminem, and two, does this chapter's title have something to do with Shady? Maybe it's just me. Anywho, keep writing, your doing great!

Your story sounds really nice, but I can't take much more of this first person view stuff. Because I'm having a hard time figuring out who's who in this story, I think one person's Riku but it's really Sora or whatever, at least put a note on top like ' Sora's POV ' or something, cuz I'm gettin' really confused.