Cute story but I still wish Inuyasha would have been more heroic and tried to go out and rescue her. But over all well done.

Near the end of the story kinda reminded me of the movie enough with jennifer lopez but it was good.

It was good...

that was an interesting story, the ending was cute

so wait, their dad is alive?

15? I thought guns only had like 6 rounds o.O

I really liked the story, you told it well. But I honestly almost stopped when you started the big fight scene. After Kagome took care of Naraku and was waiting for her step dad... That was COMPLETELY 99% ripped from the Catwoman movie. It made me so disappointed in you. The rest of it was pretty great, a little common for how the two were lab partners and such. But I liked the hood and how her secret identity played out. Overall good but don't steal movie scenes so blatantly like that again k

Tbh, this would be a great story of not for one very major loophole. You know you can call the police, right? What with stalking and raping and the clear abuse and emotional damage, the police has gotta believe you. All this stuff only happens because people don't say the things they're supposed to. But other than that, it's not bad a story; quite entertaining.

great story
there wasn't details about some important stuff
and it wasn't 100% with the characters
BUT it is an awesome story

AND I WANT TO POINT OUT THAT
NARAKUS FATHER DOESN'T HAVE A NAME

i like it so far. it dose peek my interest. if i find a chapter to make me squeel like the obsessed fan girl/boy i am . i shall review

This whole scene is from that Jennifer Lopes movie, "Enough"

I love how you used bub , I thought I was the only one that see that.

This was. A really good story. Although I would have to say that there is a few things that I think you could fix it. But other than that it was great! Keep writeing

This story is to his for such short chapters and your put ins at the end are hella long and annoying.

Really enjoyed your story ! I wore a hoodie almost everyday at school so this just related to me . The insults you used in this became my counter attacks to the everyday insults . I think that this may be one of the most realistic stories I've ever read . Thanks for everything .
-BWR